I am quite proud of this as it represents another step forward in my quest to write believable characters that seem 'rea'’ in a way that the TNGers never did to me. Kirk & Co. always had blow-ups, fights, assertions of authority, and other causes of strife between the main characters, but they remained friends. It seemed to me that Picard & Co. rarely even lifted their voices at one another. It’s up to you to decide how well I’ve done, and if it fits into your own notion of what "believable" is.
Is it my imagination, or is there possibly a more subtle tension underlying the overt problems between the characters...?
Sorry, but a well done and unlikeable character isn't fun to read about. A poorly done but likeable one isn't either. As of yet the main character and his captain just haven't demonstrated anything that makes me want to root for them.
"And again, I’ve thwarted your will. That’s really what this is all about, isn’t it, Captain?" I demand hotly. "You cannot stomach the fact that I won’t let you have what you want, the way you want it!"
I'm starting to think I was mistaken about a perceived underlying tension of a...more personal nature between the two. Frankly this now seems more like two alpha wolf personality types clashing. It would have been interesting if my perspective had been true, though, and instead of continuing to yell they had suddenly started kissing, or one of them broke down crying and then they were in eachother's arms. OTOH, it also probably would have been rather cliché.
Erm...I guess we all know where your mind is, then. I wasn't thinking quite that...graphically. Just something along the lines of an unspoken attraction that was driving a wedge between them because neither one would admit it. However, I now seriously doubt this to be the case.
And: Bad Larry! Very Bad Larry! I have some kind of cheesy 70s' porn music in my head now when I re-read certain lines...
The mission continues.
Any Klink proponents care to forward a theory/rationale for their behaviour here?
There's just as much variation in the individual Klingon psyche as there is in the human psyche.
Heh, even though La'ra and the other Klinks may have already read this, I'm surprised none commented on your characterisation of the Klinks here.
There are all sorts as we know, and I'm sure that while we have altruistic Klingons like La'ra, devious Klingons like Ron'jar, stolid/stoic Klingons like Kadh, there are also nasty Klingons like JOLLYROGERs Dath'mar. The evil (by Fed standards) Klingons here are yet another facet of them.
Any Klink proponents care to forward a theory/rationale for their behaviour here?
The crew are what make a ship. This is a seasoned frigate crew, and they're not letting bickering senior officers get to them. Their previous captain trained them well.
I'd like to see some POV from the lower officers and NCO compliment in later instalments if at all possible. See just what your crew thinks about their squabbling CO's.
I'd like to see some POV from the lower officers and NCO compliment in later instalments if at all possible. See just what your crew thinks about their squabbling CO's. You've intrigued me...
I'm guessing that the 'used to be sleeping together secretly and had a falling out' theory would be getting a lot of play.
If these are the kind of blow ups you contend with in your life on a daily basis, then my friend... you live a very interesting life.
Any who, thou art welcome for the feed back. You have always kept me happy in my own posts and I am glad to return the favor.