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Re: First Steps
« Reply #20 on: June 22, 2005, 02:41:00 am »
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I'm glad you're enjoying my story, boys, but could you tell me what you think of my characterisations, and if these people seem real to you? Specifically, from Ch 3?

Seem real to me. Donally could use some more depth but Andrea reminds me of a woman I know. So yes.
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First Steps - Chapter Four, Pt II
« Reply #21 on: June 23, 2005, 07:24:24 am »
Thanks Grim, and don't worry about Donally. Thanks to judicious input from La'ra, she gets some depth later on. Right now, we're establishing who she is. Soon we will begin to see why she is that way.
And here's the second part of the same chapter. Tell me what you think.

Time: 1350 hours
Location: Rec. Deck Upper Level, USS Illustrious.


"Andie, do you have a date that none of us know of?"

Andrea shot a startled look at the speaker, those words suddenly registering where the previous ones had flowed around her and not been heeded. "Sorry, what?" she pushed out, stalling for time to come up with a plausible answer to what her friend was hinting at none too subtly.

Ensign Alicia Rio, the senior Gamma-shift engineering officer, rolled her eyes in exasperation and blew out of her mouth. "Damnit, girl, you didn’t hear a damn word I said, did you?"

"Sure I did, Alicia." Andrea threw out a pleading look to the rest of their table--a look that was easily seen by Ensign Rio--but no one would help her out. Their smirks confirmed for Andie that her friends were enjoying her predicament.

"Well?" the dusky-skinned Latino demanded, her expressive liquid brown eyes holding both amusement and annoyance in what seemed like equal measure.

"Well..." Andrea groped, trying to remember the thread of their conversation before she’d tuned out again. She drew a blank, but Alicia’s last words jumped out at her. "To answer your question, no, I don’t have a date." But someone else does, she thought, her excitement growing once again.

Somewhat mollified but not satisfied, Alicia posed another question. "Well, if you’ve not got a date why are you always looking at the doors every time somebody walks in?"

Damn, Andie thought. She had hoped she wasn’t being that obvious, but such was her degree of preoccupation she didn’t realise that her friends noticed she’d lost track of the conversation at least three separate times. Their curiosity raised, another of her friends posed a question of their own.

"You might not think you’ve got a date, but does the person you’re waiting on realise that?" Melissa Guzzman asked pointedly before Andrea could answer Alicia’s question. "Is it Markus again? I’ve noticed you’ve been very close with him over the past few days," she asked with a leer.

"What? No!" Andie protested, staring wide-eyed and slightly open-mouthed at the olive-skinned nurse. "I’m not dating Markus!" she insisted, strongly enough that now everyone thought she was lying.

"Yeah, tell me another one, Blue-eyes," Rachel Polanskis chipped in. The sun-bronzed Australian legal officer further observed, "You’ve been distracted all afternoon, watching that door like a hawk. It’s not like you, and it’s also not like you to fob us off with these lame excuses."

Andrea stammered a bit and blushed at being so transparent, but of course her friends took this to mean that she really did have a thing with--or for--the handsome young Swiss scientist.

"I knew it! I knew there had to be some other reason Markus turned me down!" the fifth member of their party hissed out. The good-natured clobbering of Andrea stopped dead and everyone turned to stare at Cristina Nicoluzzi wide eyed.

"You never told us--"

"So that’s why you’ve been so--"

"He what? When did you ask him--"

"Now come on girls, that enough," Andrea put in weakly.

"I don’t need any defending from you, Andrea!" Cristina snapped back, ignoring the exclamations of her friends.

"Tina, that’s not fair and you know it," Melissa chided gently. "None of us knew you were interested in Markus, so how can you blame any of us for stepping on your toes?"

Gathering her wits, Andrea went on the offensive before this spiralled any further out of control. "For the record, everyone, I am not seeing Markus in anything other than a friendly capacity, but I am waiting on someone else making an appearance--for a non-romantic event!" she quickly added as the speculation machine looked set to explode into overdrive.

Addressing at the Gamma-shift doctor, Andrea offered, "I’m sorry about you and Markus, Tina, really I am. I have noticed that he seems interested in me, but I’m not interested in a romantic relationship with him. Admittedly," she added on a second’s reflection, "I’m not sure he knows that."

Tina’s expression softened, but she still didn’t seem happy. "Fine. You’d better tell him though, so he’s not pining after you," she all but sneered.

"Oh, get over it, will you?" Andrea demanded tiredly, not wanting to fight with her bitchy colleague. "It’s not like I knew about it, so back off! Maybe he’s just not that into you."

Alicia cut off whatever Tina was going to say with a brisk question that would hopefully get them back on track and down from each other’s throats. "So, Andrea, if you’re not waiting on a date, why are you so eager to see this person? And who is it you’re waiting on?"

Andie watched Tina slump back and simmer in silence while Melissa and Rachel leaned in expectantly. If it weren’t for her rather sudden falling out with Tina, Andrea would have been amused, rolled her eyes, and given them all an exasperated look. Not wanting to alienate Tina further by basically ignoring her and pretending it hadn’t happened, she just replied in a reticent manner.

"It’s a surprise. I don’t want us all staring at him--at them when they come in," she hurriedly corrected herself while mentally cursing her slip, "or it might tip off the surprise."

"What kind of surprise?" Rachel immediately asked.

Andie did roll her eyes at that one. "Well if I told you it wouldn’t be a surprise any more, now would it?"

"He still won’t know if you’re only telling us!" Rachel protested with a lewd emphasis on the mystery person’s identity.

"It’s a surprise for all of you," Andrea murmured. "I want genuine reactions from everyone or they’ll think they’ve been set up. That probably would spoil things."

Her three non-sulking friends exchanged looks, then leaned back resignedly in their chairs. "You’re just not going to tell us, are you?" Melissa asked with a slight smile on her face that definitely did reach her eyes.

"It’s a secret," Andrea nodded, noticing some sort of appraisal/approval going on behind the nurse’s eyes. "Though as you’ve all noticed, I’m expecting them through the door at any moment so you shouldn’t have to wait too long to have your curiosity satisfied."

That annoying little furry monster better not pick today to decide he doesn’t want to play his damn game! Andrea thought with a mental frown.

"Well." It was Melissa again, speaking to all of them after a few moments of silence. She shook her head in bemusement, her glossy brown ringlets bouncing off her face and shoulders as she did so. "What are we going to talk about until this mystery person makes an appearance? Or with this big surprise for all of us hanging over our heads, can we stand the excitement?"

Andrea, Alicia, Rachel, and even Tina rolled their eyes at her, looked at each other, then burst out laughing.

They all managed to settle down again after that and indulge in idle chit-chat and useless speculation with every new person who came into the Rec. Deck. Finally, after nearly twenty more minutes, Garn walked in, seeming almost hesitant.

Andrea tried to give no reaction, but by this time all her friends were watching her and among them were the ship’s legal officer and psychiatrist, not to mention an engineer and a nurse who both had an eye for details.

"Garn?" Alicia whispered incredulously as the group of women surreptitiously kept an eye on the Tellarite’s progress across the room. "You’ve set up a surprise for that obnoxious little..."

"I told you, it’s not a romantic event!" Andrea protested quietly.

"So, you’re going to humiliate him? Take him down a notch? That’s not very nice, Andie," Melissa stated with a disapproving frown.

"Wait and see!" Andrea demanded, a bit put out by the nurse’s assumption.

They all sat back and waited expectantly, trying not to stare outright at the mildly unpopular bridge officer. Garn walked past their table without comment and made it to his games cube on the lower level without anyone talking to him. It was only now that she was actually paying rapt attention to his daily routine that Andrea could see why Garn was lonely. She’d only recently gotten to know that his irritable exterior was just that--an exterior--because they worked closely together and spent considerable time in each other’s company. It seemed that no one else was really willing to make the effort to do likewise and a lot of that was because Garn was so obnoxious, even more so than your average Tellarite.

He sat down and started up the game, entering his own personal settings for Concentrex, a game of skill that helped improve your ability to maintain a 3D picture in your head. It was very useful for navigators and helmsmen to play and it could be a lot of fun too.

Andrea was on the edge of her seat, unashamedly staring at him from the floor above. Her heart was racing and she was very excited, and the length of time it took for Garn to start the game was almost agony for her.

All of a sudden the game’s holographic display--which had been doing it’s usual job and forming geometric shapes--flickered, the console itself gave an electronic ’burp’, and then Andrea’s message was displayed for all to see, hanging five feet in the air above the startled Tellarite.

At first displaying it in his native language, the message started alternating the 3D lettering from Tellarite to Federation Standard Anglish every five seconds. The Rec. Deck, which had been bustling with noise and activity, fell into a surprised silence.

When everyone noticed that it was Garn at the centre of this little display the silence seemed set to continue into a horrifically embarrassing pregnant pause, the end result of which would be Garn fleeing the room practically traumatised. Andie’s heart rose into her throat as the one second pause extended into two without the response she’d hoped for. She saw all her good intentions going up in a warp-core breach until finally, blissfully, someone yelled, "Happy Birthday you miserable bastard!" and began laughing.

It was as if a dam had broken, as people started clapping and shouting more "Happy Birthdays" at the terminally embarrassed navigator. Then someone started the human crew singing a rousing rendition of ‘For He’s A Jolly Good Fellow’ and the room dissolved into strenuous back pounding and hoof shaking.

Andrea heard her friends’ startled gasps and the beginnings of laughter, and caught a warm look from Melissa that she wondered at. She only cracked up herself when, from amongst the various pastel uniforms at the centre of the room below, a loud, growling voice was heard to yell a single word in realisation and accusation all at once.

"BROWN!!!! "


Time: 1630 hours
Location: Bridge, USS Illustrious.


Andrea couldn’t keep the smirk off her face. It was hours past now, but she couldn’t help but feel smug. Her plan had worked in the way she’d wanted it to and there was no fall out from it.

So far, a little voice commented nervously, but she dismissed it quickly.

Plus, her smirking was annoying Garn.

Managing to keep her eyes on her duties, she still found plenty of time to be staring straight at the navigator every time he sneaked a look at her.

"Stop it!" Garn finally hissed when the Lieutenant Commander Arruntha got up to converse with the science officer.

"Admit it, you’re thrilled by what happened," Andrea replied quietly, the smile evident in her voice.

"You are a devil-woman from the deepest of Tellar’s Seven Hells!" he growled, not quite managing to hide his own good humour.

"I’ll take that as a ‘yes’, then," the Scot murmured innocently.

Garn quickly checked on the Saurian’s location. Seeing that the second officer was still occupied with his questions for Markus, he leaned in closer to the human and said in a normal tone, "Thank you."

Nothing more was said between them for some time, but Andrea felt the ‘smug’ part of her smile melt away into a genuine one of pure satisfaction and camaraderie.

The pleasure was all mine, my new friend.
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Re: First Steps
« Reply #22 on: June 24, 2005, 09:27:45 am »
awwww it brought a smile on my face
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Re: First Steps
« Reply #23 on: June 24, 2005, 08:32:31 pm »
Geez, I didn't think Klingons could smile...
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Re: First Steps
« Reply #24 on: June 24, 2005, 11:47:13 pm »
I suggest you watch, first of all, the TOS episode "The Day of the Dove" and then the TNG season 2 episode "A Matter of Honor". Not only do Klingons smile, they laugh!
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Re: First Steps
« Reply #25 on: June 25, 2005, 05:30:09 pm »
Josh, I was teasing Grim. I am above all a Classic Trek fan, in case you haven't yet read my own stories. Why don't you comment on Jaeih's wonderful story instead of my half-baked and non-funny jokes?  ;D
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Re: First Steps
« Reply #26 on: June 25, 2005, 06:14:20 pm »
What? I can't play the straight man to your comedian? Sheesh...Some people don't appreciate anything. :P
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First Steps - Chapter Five, Pt I
« Reply #27 on: June 29, 2005, 07:35:53 am »
Again, I seem to be a bit prolific with my chapter lengths, so here is part one of Chapter Five. Read, enjoy, let me know what you think of it, my style, the characters, the whole ball of wax, as the Yanks say. *grin*

Chapter Five


Time: 1630 hours.
Location: Captain’s quarters, USS Illustrious.


Leo Bates sighed and rubbed his eyes under his spectacles as once again he tried to make his point. "Commander, no harm was done. It did not impact on ship’s routine, efficiency, or operations. I do not have a problem with just having an informal word with the girl, to which I’m sure she’ll be amenable."

Eileen Donally, who’d gotten up to pace while she made her point, stopped and turned to face him as she frowned down at her CO. Feeling slightly exasperated herself, she tried again. "Sir, I don’t think you understand the seriousness of what was done here! Unauthorised computer tampering--"

Bates cut her off, knowing now that there was no way to make Donally see his position even though he understood hers perfectly despite her protestations to the contrary. He decided to lay down the law to his pedantic second-in-command.

"Commander, I know how serious a charge that is and what it entails. However, I’m almost certain I know the motivations of the officer in question, which is why I’ve made sure no one’s put her on report. Furthermore, that all you have is circumstantial evidence anyway--"

"Sir, with all due respect, it’s pretty obvious who did it and if you’ll allow me to--"

"Commander Donally, you will drop this matter as of now," Captain Leo Bates commanded. Eileen’s mouth set in a hard line but she nodded briefly and said nothing further. Letting the steel slip from his voice, Leo elaborated in the hope that Donally would take at least some of what he said on board for her future dealings with the crew.

"I know that tampering with any of the ship’s computer systems is a serious offence, and rightly so. But I also know that ever since James Kirk was put on trial in ’67 for the apparent death of his records officer, Starfleet Sciences and Engineering have designed and implemented a much tougher series of safeguards to prevent any tampering affecting other systems. Far more vigorous methods of resisting unauthorised code alteration have been introduced, including," he added for emphasis, "isolating the lab-quality games terminals from the rest of the ship’s computer systems."

Pausing there to let that sink in, even though he knew Donally would already be aware of it, Leo took off his spectacles and started to polish them as he continued his lecture.

"In my opinion, and in the opinions of Commander Stocco and Lieutenant T`Mien, the alleged actions of this officer do not constitute a threat to the safety of the Illustrious’ computer systems, the ship itself, Starfleet in particular, or the Federation in general. I am convinced that the motives behind this ‘incident’ were pure and instigated for the sole purpose of obtaining the observed result.

"Furthermore, accusing the officer in question with such a charge will enter a formal and irreversible mark on their permanent record. Bearing in mind that the officer in question is young, high-spirited, and inexperienced, and taking into account that this is the Federation Star Fleet and not the Romulan Imperial Fleet or the Klingon Deep Space Fleet, you may wish to consider the following:

"Why I, as captain, having full knowledge of these events even to the point of consulting our Chief of Security and our Computer Officer on them, have not put this officer on report or interviewed them myself. Also, why I’ve made it clear to the other command officers that I want this ignored without entering any official correspondence."

Bates stopped there and looked at his XO as if expecting a reply. For her part, Donally was smarting from the subtlety of the captain’s approach. That is, as subtle as using a photon torpedo to crack a walnut.

Donally had not often encountered this side of her new CO, but by the very fact that she had Eileen knew that she had pushed the captain to the end of his patience. Bates was now out to make a point--that their respective applications of the regulations were different, and that it would be his judgement that would prevail.

"Well, Commander?" Bates demanded.

I might as well give in to the inevitable here, Eileen thought with an inward sigh, and stated flatly, "You did not want to interview the officer because then it would become part of the official record, which would have meant you’d have to follow through on certain procedures. Also, since these matters fall under captain’s discretion anyway, the end result would be the same and it would have saved all the effort involved. By preventing the issue from becoming official, you gained the result you desired without it affecting the record of the officer in question."

"Very good, Commander," Bates said, his normally friendly brown eyes now cold and distant. He finally decided to say something to her that he’d held off from saying twice before in the hope that she’d come round on her own, on the previous instances where she’d exhausted his patience.

"Commander, I don’t know your previous captain, either personally or by reputation, so I don’t know how you did things on the Coventry. I picked you as my First because of your exemplary record and from how you impressed me in your interview. I thought that our differing styles would complement each other and we’d each provide a necessary balance for the other.

"However, I do expect you to support me once I’ve made my decision on a matter. This... persistent badgering of me to try and change my mind is not what I expected from an officer of your calibre."

Eileen flinched inwardly at that, though no trace of the hit reached her exterior. She had not expected her competence to be questioned when she began this fight as she thought she was just doing her job. Unfortunately, she could see that he was right--insofar as her conduct was concerned. Donally herself thought this to be an important matter that the captain was dismissing far too lightly, but in trying to make him recognise this she had overstepped the bounds of persuasion and gone argumentative. To the protocol-minded New Yorker that was every bit as bad as the infraction she was pushing. Nothing else from the captain could have hit home more solidly.

Taking Bates’ moment of pause for breath as an opportunity, Eileen spoke up. "Captain, I offer my apologies. You are absolutely right and I admit to overstepping my limits. I assure you, it won’t happen again."

Bates raised his eyebrows in surprise at the admission from his XO. "I’m pleased to hear that, Commander. You are not to take this as censorship, though. I value your candid counsel and expect you to continue to give it, even though I might not always take it."

"Understood, Captain," she replied formally.

Bates suppressed another sigh, then said, "I need to take a break, Commander. We’ll continue this meeting after dinner. Could you return at 1900 hours and we’ll get the rest of the evaluations done then?"

Although he did mean it as an honest question, knowing the duty load of his First and Science Officer, Donally had no problem in hearing it as an order. "Of course, sir. I can take this opportunity to assess Lieutenant Bertschinger’s progress."

"Ah yes!" Bates perked up noticeably as he remembered the Swiss’ project. "You can update me on how he and Ensign Shax are doing with their planetary orbit modelling."

"Yes sir. If that is all?" Eileen stated neutrally, still personally irritated and feeling somewhat let down by the young lieutenant at his complicity in last night’s ‘incident’.

If Bates noticed anything new about her demeanour he didn’t comment on it. He had a headache threatening him, lurking behind his eyeballs, and it would only go away when his XO took it with her. Carefully putting away his spectacles he stated, "Yes, that is all. Dismissed, Commander."


Time: 1730 hours.
Location: Officer’s Mess, USS Illustrious.


Donally sat down at her now customary table at the forward-most area of the room, setting her tray in front of her and laying a napkin in her lap, as drilled into by her mother all those years ago. The proprieties of civilised eating having been observed, Eileen began precisely and methodically working through her steak-and-kidney pie. It had been an almost unconscious choice, picking her favourite meal, but it reflected her mood accurately. When confronted with the unusual or unexpected in her day-to-day life Eileen retreated into the familiar to regroup and help her analyse what had happened.

So, safely secured in her usual routine of solitude and comfort food, Eileen considered her meeting with the captain and why it had not gone the way she’d expected it to.

Oh, she’d known that Bates would resist her ideas based on his own previous reactions to the incident. She had even entertained the notion that she would fail to change his mind. What she hadn’t counted on was Bates’ reaction to her.

As first officer of the Coventry, Captain Setlik had appreciated her adherence to the regulations as it coincided with his own approach to command. The "entirely satisfactory" review he’d attached to her file--the highest form of praise from a Vulcan, she’d been told--went a long way toward securing her promotion to full commander.

However, by remaining consistent to those standards she was apparently getting under her new CO’s skin. Despite what Bates had said it was quite clear that he didn’t like her command style, so it was a mystery to Eileen why he had in fact chosen her for his XO. He seemed quite sincere about the conflicting styles keeping them both honest, but there was something else there that she couldn’t immediately place.

Could he be having second thoughts about me? That he’s bitten off more than he can chew? Eileen wondered. She had no rational basis for those thoughts, just the reactions of an annoyed captain and a nebulous feeling grown from that. Maybe he was thinking that a compromise between our viewpoints would best possible solution, but doesn’t realise that some things shouldn’t be compromised on?

Eileen was proceeding from an assumption, a thing that she didn’t like to do--especially from such ambiguous data--so she shut down that unproductive line of thinking until she had something more concrete to base it from. Instead, she wondered at the actual cause of their disagreement.

Why is he so determined to let this girl away with it? Why can’t--or won’t--he admit that what she did was wrong, regardless of the motives behind it, and have her punished accordingly? Eileen grappled with the questions that assaulted the very structure of her existence, trying to understand the why of it all. Why can’t he see that the regulations are there for a reason! All the regulations too, not just the ones we want to obey. Doesn’t he see that by not punishing her for it he encourages more of the same? That by fighting me on such an issue he’s basically giving the crew tacit permission to repeat her little performance at will? That by doing so, otherwise good officers are tempted into joining in on such contra-regulation behaviour?

With all these dire situations abound in her head, it would not be too much of an exaggeration to say that Donally could envision the fall of the Federation into anarchy from this one incident, related to one junior officer. Although she didn’t realise it herself, in her mind she had already exonerated Lieutenant Bertschinger as just being overly accommodating and this entire situation was solely due to a certain Lieutenant JG Andrea Brown.

Her thoughts were brought back to the here-and-now by the clatter of her knife and fork against the empty plate. Eileen looked down in surprise to see that she’d finished off her meal practically unawares, so deeply was this issue troubling her.

She sighed heavily, resigned now to the fact that nothing could be done about it. For the moment, anyway. If she was right about Brown, the young lieutenant would try something else and Donally would be vindicated. Eileen just had to bide her time.

As she got up to head for her next task, with Lieutenant Bertschinger, Eileen Donally comforted herself with a final thought.

Father would tear strips off Captain Bates for this kind of leadership.
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Re: First Steps
« Reply #28 on: July 01, 2005, 02:52:39 am »
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As she got up to head for her next task, with Lieutenant Bertschinger, Eileen Donally comforted herself with a final thought.

Father would tear strips off Captain Bates for this kind of leadership.

This and the small ref to Donally's mother indeed point to her upbringing to be the critical factor in her behavior. However, most people would rebel (imho) against such a strict upbringing. Are you gonna show us the reason Donally sticked to hers or do you want to leave it at this?
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First Steps - Chapter Five, Pt II
« Reply #29 on: July 03, 2005, 11:14:16 am »
Thanks for your comments, Grim, they're very welcome. And about Donally's upbringing: relaaaaax, guy! La'ra and I had a little brainstorming and her full motivations are background will be revealled, eventually. Not in this story, though. You'll just have to stasy tuned to the further installments! *smile*

Anyway, on with the show, and here's Part II of Chapter Five.

Date: 20th July 2272
Time: 1600 hours.
Stardate: 7428.6
Location: Bridge, USS Illustrious.


Andrea settled more comfortably into her chair and nodded goodbye to Lieutenant Sherak, the Alpha-shift helmsman. He had just finished updating her on the events of his shift and what she could expect on her own, and as a result she was excited.

It had taken almost a month but something was finally going to happen during the Beta-shift. She was going to be at the helm for the Illustrious’ arrival at Starbase Twelve.

Andrea checked her helm console databanks and confirmed that the ship was on course at the right speed--as she had been for the past twenty-three days--and that their ETA at the starbase was a bare two hours away.

Finally! Andrea silently celebrated. Finally, a chance to actually do my job and fly the ship. I don’t even know how she handles for real!

She ran a thorough diagnostic of her control panel to make sure that all was in working order and that she wouldn’t be shown up by faulty equipment when her time came. The power status monitor on the multifunction display was replaced by the diagnostic readout, and Andie was pleased to see that everything checked out.

She cleared the readout and brought up a holographic representation of their projected course so she could visualise any obstacles she might have to manoeuvre around. Their course into the Gamma 400 system was clear though, as the three small, barren, rocky planets this system had to offer were on the far side of the star from the asteroid that housed Starbase Twelve’s admin facilities with it’s co-orbiting dry-docks.

Good, no planets to hit on my first real turn at the helm, Andrea thought with a small measure of relief, before realising, Oh crap. That just means it’ll be a straight warp into the base. A shrug and a quiet sigh. Oh well, at least I’m getting to do something here.

The thought made her brighten again. She looked over to her companion at the navigation console and saw that he too was absorbed in his board, running diagnostics and updating the ship’s position in the navigation databanks.

She suddenly felt rather than saw Arruntha’s large yellow eyes on her, so she returned her attention to her controls and the astrogator between her and Garn, becoming watchful for sensor alerts indicating foreign objects in their path or the vicinity of the ship.

*****

Nearly two hours later, Ensign Garn gruffly announced, "Lieutenant Commander Arruntha, we are approaching the Gamma 400 system, ETA to system boundary is ten minutes."

"Thank you, Navigator," the second officer replied, then turned to the comm. officer. "Mr. Surok, inform the captain we’ll be arriving at Starbase Twelve within fifteen minutes."

"Aye Commander," the slim Vulcan replied and murmured into his intercom. Moments later he informed, "Sir, the captain will be on the bridge momentarily."

"Very good."

The entire bridge crew seemed to sit straighter and become even more alert after this news, with the exception of Surok himself. As good as his word, Bates arrived on the bridge after a few minutes and relieved Arruntha, who updated him on current ship’s status before moving behind the captain to stand at the internal security station.

Bates took in the viewscreen, which was locked onto the their destination and now showing the Gamma 400 star as a disk instead of just another pinprick of light, then turned to Garn.

"Ensign, current position?" he asked.

"Crossing system boundary in two minutes, Captain," the Tellarite replied.

"Mr. Brown, slow to warp two when we get there."

"Aye sir," she replied suppressing the excitement she felt.

The captain then swung his chair to face the comm. officer. "Mr. Surok, hail the base and confirm my 1830 meeting with Base Commander Kellogg."

"Yes, Captain," Surok replied and quietly set about his task.

"Crossing system boundary, sir," Garn updated.

"Dropping to warp two as ordered, Captain," Andrea announced. "ETA at Starbase Twelve ingress point is ninety seconds."

"Thank you, Lieutenant," Bates acknowledged.

"Captain, Commodore Kellogg has confirmed your meeting with her, and is ‘looking forward to seeing you’," Surok told the captain.

A small smile was evident on Bates’ face at the slight emphasis employed by his Vulcan comm. officer. It’s not exactly a JG’s place to disapprove of how a base commander runs her affairs, he thought with amusement, but Maria’s never been one for formalities unless someone actually breaks her rules.

Aloud, he said, "Very good, Mr. Surok."

At the helm console, Andrea’s hands effortlessly guided the cruiser across the empty orbital tracks of the system’s planets at eight times light-speed, compensating for the gravitational influence of the M-type dwarf star almost without thought. Under this slight pressure, her thoughts had emptied of anything unrelated to her task and her training had coalesced and crystallised in her head, ready to deal with anything.

The sparse asteroid belt that surrounded the star outside the third planet’s orbit loomed larger in the viewscreen, centred on one huge hunk of rock in particular. The distance wound down to the warp ingress point some five million kilometres from the base.

"Warp ingress point in ten seconds, Captain," she called out.

"Go to sublight, full impulse to the base," Bates replied.

"Aye sir. Going sublight... now. Transporter range of the base in sixty-six seconds."

"Very good", he acknowledged. Turning to Markus he asked, "Any other ships in the area, Science Officer?"

The Swiss performed a quick active sensor sweep and reported back. "Yes, sir. There is a police cutter in orbit of the starbase, the science vessel USS Grissom in Dry-Dock Three, and the destroyer USS Etzel on patrol around the system. No non-Federation vessels detected."

"Thank you, Mr. Bertschinger," Bates acknowledged genially. "Mr. Surok, pay our compliments to the other vessels and accommodate any requests for information they may make."

"Yes, Captain."

"All stop and hold relative position at 40,000 kilometres, Lieutenant Brown."

"Aye sir," Andrea replied, then after a few seconds added, "Answering all stop, sir."

"Very well. Mr. Arruntha, you have the conn while I go to see the sector commander."

"Aye-aye sir. I have the conn," the Saurian replied in his silver voice as Captain Bates got up from his chair, into which he settled as the captain disappeared into the turbolift.

Andrea made sure that her controls were set for thrusters at station-keeping, then leaned back in her chair to take in the image on the viewscreen of the great rock that contained Starbase Twelve. It was less boring than most asteroids as even though the rock itself contained many tunnels and rooms, the most recent facilities added to the base consisted of a glittering conglomeration of metal that adorned the outer surface facing the ship.

Andrea was envious of Bates at being able to go over there, though she knew that a crew in space for less than two months wasn’t entitled to any shore leave. She was put out that she was being denied her chance to see her first piece of alien architecture.

All things in mainstream Federation society--and Starfleet in particular--were designed along the same lines no matter who built them, be they Tellarite, Vulcan, or Andorian. The tunnels and rooms of what had become Starbase Twelve had been carved out of the rock by the Karsids, a long gone--and, some thought, now extinct--race that had dominated this area of space several centuries ago. Their once great Empire had lasted for centuries itself, until the Orions and Klingons had revolted against their overlords.

And I’m missing out on all that history! Andrea thought glumly. Maybe before we leave for the Klingon border we’ll get the chance to come back.

Consoling herself with that thought, she awaited the return of Captain Bates.

*****

The captain of the Illustrious strode through the oddly proportioned corridors of the base as he trekked ever deeper into the asteroid towards the base commander’s office.

Although he’d been here many times before during his twenty-seven years of active duty he always liked returning to this place, being fascinated by it’s non-conforming dimensions. It was one of the few facilities that Starfleet used that failed to cater to the omnipresent humanoid form, and as such Bates found it refreshing and invigorating to visit.

Strolling through these corridors was like literally walking through a part of the history of this sector of the galaxy. However, Bates was honest enough with himself to realise that, even though this place was refreshingly different from his standard environment, he wouldn’t want to live here as it’s very alienness would eventually start playing with his mind.

Such musings occupied his thoughts until he arrives at Kellogg’s office, upon which he announced himself to her assistant. "Captain Bates to see Base Commander Kellogg."

"Yes, Captain. One moment please," the Caitian lieutenant told him, and paged her superior. Bates couldn’t hear the exchange but after a moment he was told to go right in.

Maria Kellogg was standing in front of her desk to greet him as he entered, and he shook her hand warmly. "Maria," he greeted her with a genuine smile of warmth. "You’re looking well."

"Leo, you old space dog. Good to see you," she responded in kind with a grin.

"Hey, look who’s calling who old, Commodore," he shot back in mock annoyance.

Kellogg’s grin turned slightly wry at that. "Yeah, seems like only yesterday I was ChEng of the Potemkin, until I remember all the crap that’s happened to me since I took charge of this base."

"Six years of admin duties and juggling Klingons and researchers from all over known space," Leo said. "I can see how that could be regarded as ‘crap’," he added with a smirk.

"Yeah, well, now that Starbase Twelve has been formally claimed as Federation space, I don’t have to put up with the Klingons so much," Kellogg noted. "During the Sixties we were still a ‘Free Space’ port. Now everything has to go through ‘the proper channels’," she intoned weightily, her eyes smiling, "and I can dodge a lot of extended diplomatic duty by simply refusing to let Klingon warships in."

"Yeah, those were the days," Leo agreed. He’d been the XO of the Scovil in the early Sixties before taking command of the Illustrious in ’67, when she was still a Surya-class heavy frigate. During that time he’d visited this base several times, most notably just before the defection of a Klingon scientist researching the old Karsid records, and had struck up a good working relationship with then-Captain Kellogg. That relationship had grown into the easy friendship they now shared.

"Well, that’s enough reminiscing for this visit, Leo," Maria stated, breaking into his reverie. "What’s the business end of things like?"

"As you probably know, the Illustrious has been recently re-commissioned and is undergoing her shakedown cruise en route to Starbase 20 on the Klingon/Triangle border," Leo explained, just in case she didn’t know. Unlikely, he thought absentmindedly, but she might have been busy. A BC’s work is never done. "This is just a little courtesy call that I wanted to make in person rather than by subspace, to tell you that we’ll be doing extensive trials and testing in the local area so that if we run into trouble you’ll know where to send the rescue ships."

Maria nodded seriously. "Understood, Leo." She knew as well as any Starfleet veteran that shakedowns were fraught with dangers both expected and not, and knowing where you were if you needed help ensured that help would indeed come. "Any specific systems in mind for where you’ll be bouncing around?" she asked.

Leo leaned forward in his chair and said, "We had considered the Pollux system as it has two uninhabited M-class planets we could survive on if something went disastrously wrong, but it’s unofficially quarantined since the Enterprise found Apollo."

Maria grinned and Leo shrugged. "Who knows if it was actually him, but according to the tricorder logs the Enterprise landing party made he was a being of great power and we don’t know if he really is gone for good." He smiled again and added, "Besides, it’s almost four days away--back where we came from--and I wanted to see you in person."

Maria chuckled and graced him with a high-watt smile. "Leo, you flirt, don’t make me call up Jackie and tell tales on you!"

Leo grinned back at her. "She wouldn’t believe you, especially after the way you behaved on Deneva." His friend affected an innocent "who me?" pose, eyes wide, and he shook his head, amused.

"Yes, so, anyway," he continued, eliciting another chuckle from Maria, "we’ve decided on system s1022. It’s only twelve hours away at emergency warp speed, and it has an uninhabited M-class planet that we could survive on for however long it takes to be rescued. There’s also a few more interesting systems with a parsec of s1022 that can give our sensors and laboratories a good workout, plus the Tau Eridani Cloud itself, if we’re feeling brave," he finished with a smile.

"I’d stay away from the Cloud if I were you, Leo," Maria warned him. "It’s been spawning some pretty nasty ion storms of late and our long range sensors and probes have been monitoring severe gravitational distortions for the past two months. It wouldn’t be wise going in there with a perfect ship an a top-notch crew, much less a boatload of children."

"Okay then, s1022 it is," Leo amended with a smile. "Are any of these ion storms heading in that direction?"

"Let me check," she told him. Hitting her intercom tab, she instructed, "Lieutenant, get the latest long range sensor sweep data and weather forecasts for the Cloud and the area around system s1022, and send them to the Illustrious, please."

"Aye sirrr," she replied.

Snapping the channel shut she addressed Bates again. "That’s for your benefit, really. Yours and your science staff, anyway. As far as I can remember there are two storms, both force eight, but both heading away from s1022. No unusual conditions of last report in your target area."

"Thanks, Maria," he acknowledged her information.

"No problem."

"I’d better be going. I’m expected on the border by 32.9 and it’ll be around another month’s travel time to get there," Bates said, getting out of his chair.

"Okay then," Kellogg replied, coming round to his side of the desk to shake his hand. "You take care of yourself, Captain. I don’t want to have to send my ships after you."

"You’re not the only one, Commodore," he agreed. "Until next time."

"Until next time. Godspeed, Leo."

*****

Captain Bates stepped off the turbolift and onto the bridge of his ship. It was like coming home, even though most of the faces had changed since her refit. Once again he ousted Arruntha from the conn and took a status report. Nothing had changed in the half-hour he’d been gone.

"Thank you, Commander," he acknowledged the Saurian’s report, then ordered, "Ensign Garn, plot a course for system s1022 at warp eight. Lieutenant Brown, take us to the warp egress point at half impulse."

At the Helm/Nav console, both officers acknowledged and got to work. Garn’s task was ridiculously easy this time, as all he had to do was find the system in the Navigation databanks to retrieve its co-ordinates and plot a straight line from this system’s egress point. Since the destination was a bare 1.37 light-years away, there were no neutral zones or navigational hazards to manoeuvre around and he was finished within seconds.

"Course plotted and laid in, Captain," he announced just as Andrea got the ship moving. "ETA at destination is twenty-three hours, twenty-six minutes."

"Very good, Ensign. Lieutenant Brown, engage on that course at warp eight when we’re clear of the base."

"Aye sir," she responded briskly as she swung the cruiser around to face away from the asteroid at 1,000 kilometres-per-second, then gunned the impulse drive to push them up to half impulse, or one-eighth light-speed.

Andie felt a thrill. Ooh, she does handle sweetly, she thought as the cruiser heeled to starboard gracefully under minimal power. As she throttled up to half impulse she--and the whole bridge crew, including the captain--felt a tremor run through the ship. She was checking her readouts even as the captain asked, "Lieutenant?"

Feeling herself blush furiously, she kept herself facing forwards as she searched for an answer. After a few seconds, she replied, "Sir, the helm controls checks out as fully operational, no malfunctions, and the log shows I applied power smoothly," she started, managing a calm tone and forcing the defensiveness out if it. "However, there seems to be a slight fuel flow problem on Impulse Thruster Two. It could indicate a faulty inlet valve or fuel flow regulator."

Captain Bates nodded approvingly, though Andrea couldn’t see this. "Very well, Lieutenant. Good work."

As he turned to Surok to order an engineering crew to check the suspect systems, Andrea began to relax again, feeling the blush fade from her face.

Phew, that was a close one, she thought, incorrectly. I’m glad I checked this board out before we arrived. I thought I’d get it in the neck for being clumsy there! Andrea took a moment to wipe her suddenly sweaty palms on her blue uniform trousers before they reached the warp-out point. Instead, the captain accepted my word and congratulated me on doing a good job! YEAH!

Taking note of their position, she announced, "We are free and clear to navigate, Captain."

"Warp speed, Lieutenant," he ordered.

"Aye, sir," she replied, and sent them shooting out of the system toward their next destination.
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Re: First Steps
« Reply #30 on: July 03, 2005, 01:13:59 pm »
Another great installment, Jaeih. I really love your character development for everyone, and the story itself moves along nicely. Keep it up!  :)

BTW, how is your Kestrel rewrite/continuation coming along? Any chance of a chapter for SB23 soon?
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Re: First Steps
« Reply #31 on: July 04, 2005, 06:34:36 am »
Um... I'm working on it, if a little slowly. I'm up to Chapter Twelve written down, and Chapters Nine to Eleven have been rewritten and typed in. Still no end in sight, though I'm thinking (hoping, maybe... *smile*) that it'll be done at Chapter Fifteen.

So, since I don't know when it'll end, you'll just have to be patient as I'm not handing out chapters until it's done. Sorry.
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First Steps - Chapter Six
« Reply #32 on: July 07, 2005, 07:41:17 am »
Chapter Six


Date: 23rd July 2272
Time: 1530 hours.
Stardate: 7428.9
Location: Junior officers’ quarters, E Deck, USS Illustrious.


Andrea stepped into the bathroom she shared with Rachel Polanskis to find the other woman washing up at the sink. The Australian tracked her movements in the mirror but didn’t divert her attention from her ablutions as she asked, "Hey Blue-eyes, how are you?"

The Scot smiled at the Aussie’s obvious nickname for her as she replied. "Oh, not bad, just in intense pain and feeling good. I’m gonnae take a much needed shower, though, so avert your eyes from my Goddess-like body or be struck to stone for sneakin’ a peek."

Rachel rolled her eyes at Andrea’s hyperbole and, after taking in the other woman’s sweat-stained workout clothes, just commented, "Oh yeah, you do need one, don’t you." As her friend started to strip off, an unholy gleam came into Rachel’s brown eyes. "That must have been one hell of a workout, Andie," she noted, then added with a lecherous smirk, "or is there some lucky bugger now lying exhausted on your bed?"

Andrea almost blushed but tried to cover her embarrassment with a well-aimed facecloth and an offended screech as she stepped into the shower and closed the partition. "You skinny hag, you’re just jealous of my ample womanly attributes!"

Rachel grinned and peeled the wet facecloth from around her neck. "Ha ha! Andie’s embaa-raassed! Andie’s embaa-raassed!" the Aussie chanted like a schoolgirl in a playground. "Who is it? Is he cute? Did you finally bag Markus?" she pestered, thinking she was on to something.

"No!" Andrea protested over the sound of running water. "There’s nobody in there, and there never was!"

"Awww, you’re boring," her friend complained. "Live a little! Get yourself a ‘special friend’, there’s plenty to choose from on this ship."

"Geez Rachel, you sound just like my mother!" Andrea complained from behind the opaque partition. "Leave it be, will you? I don’t have time for anyone right now!"

Rachel threw up her hands in exasperation and her tone matched her feelings. "Fine, Andie. Just trying to look out for you."

"Thanks, but I’ll do it in my own time, Rachel," was the reply.

"Okay, okay," she conceded. "Well, have a good shift. I’m off to get a quick bite to eat so I guess I’ll see you tomorrow, huh?"

"Suppose so. Have a good one," Andrea called out.

"See ya, Blue-eyes."

Andrea watched the blurry outline of her friend leave then allowed herself a sigh. Damnit, I always overreact like that whenever someone asks about my love life. I’ve got to learn to calm down! she scolded herself.

She couldn’t help it though. Andrea liked other women and thought that it set her apart. This frame of mind was formed as she was growing up, as living in quiet Scottish towns she hadn’t met anyone else who’d felt the same way she did. After discovering how she felt in her fifteenth year she hadn’t felt comfortable talking about it even to her friends, but two years later she’d finally managed to open up to her two best friends. Despite their positive and supportive attitudes, Andrea still shied away from talking about it and had never told anyone else--not even her mother, and especially not her step-dad. And so she suffered in silence in a self-made purgatory that really only existed within her own head.

Still, her experiences in the wider world--specifically, attending Starfleet Academy--had exposed her to many kinds of beings and lifestyles. Andrea had felt herself pushing at her self-imposed boundaries, like a hungry cat pawing at the closed window of its owner’s home. While at the Academy she had totally devoted herself to her studies--earning her a ‘swot’ designation--but her immersion in a more open and varied environment had stayed with her, and now that she was able to have a live she was determined to live one.

She just had no idea how to start.

She was fairly sure she’d figure it out on her own, she just didn’t want to ruin any friendships she had already built by propositioning the women she was attracted to. Fledgling friendships between women were difficult enough to keep as it was without the added knowledge that your friend wanted to bed you.

And besides, she already had a list of women she liked. What would she do if the first one she approached turned her down, as was likely? Just go straight on down the list, settling for whoever consented? Should she go in no particular order as a defence against the inevitable charge of rating and categorising her friends? And once turned down--again, as was sure to happen--how long should she wait before asking another? A week? Two weeks? A month? How long was appropriate? Respectful of others’ feelings?

All these questions and uncertainties lashed at Andrea as she finished her shower and got ready for duty. She knew that she needed to find out the answers to her questions. She was not sure how long it would be before she got them.
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Re: First Steps
« Reply #33 on: July 08, 2005, 01:51:57 am »
Now that's a thing rarely (or never) seen in the trek continuum. A gay character (although fan fiction does a good job of filling the gap). I wonder where it will lead this tale to.
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Re: First Steps
« Reply #34 on: July 08, 2005, 07:30:12 pm »
The thing I like about this particular one is how your protagonist's sexuality isn't a big deal beyond being a bit of a complication with her social life.

By that I don't mean it's not important...it's just not the type of portrayal of alternative sexuality you usually see, where it's paraded about like the Homecoming Queen.

I know you credit some of that to me and that 'other' test reader of yours, but I still think you rendered it very well in this story.
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First Steps - Chapter Six, Pt II
« Reply #35 on: July 12, 2005, 07:11:15 am »
Hi all. Here is Part II of Chapter Six, Part III to come right after. All comments are welcome, let me know what you think.

Time: 1700 hours.
Location: Bridge, USS Illustrious.


"All systems check out, Captain. We are go for stage two sublight manoeuvres testing."

The helmsman’s voice carried clearly across the bridge and confirmed the report made by the Chief Engineer himself moments earlier. There was a feeling of anticipation and excitement on the bridge because of them.

None more so than in the mind and body of the helm officer, as this was their first chance to see and feel first hand what their ship could do, and what they could do with the ship.

"Very good, Lieutenant," Bates acknowledged. "Take us in, Mr. Brown, half impulse."

"Aye-aye, Sir!" Andrea replied, eyes shining.

Junior officers, Bates thought with an internal smile. They’re just like children. If I ever feel myself getting old or jaded, all I need to remember is what it’s like to see things through their eyes. Everything a source of wonder for seeing it for the first time.

For Andrea, the last hour of updates and equipment checks had been a bizarre form of almost-torture, knowing that she would be flying the ship soon, just not yet.

I just wanna fly her! she inwardly wailed behind a calm, professional exterior--or, more accurately, what she thought was a calm, professional exterior. Everyone on the bridge, including the captain, could see that she was champing at the bit to get going.

Sherak had his shot. Now it’s my turn and here we go! she thought gleefully as she sent the Illustrious swooping towards planet s1022-III at one-eighth light-speed.

The Alpha-shift had, of course, gotten first crack at the sublight manoeuvres but they’d had a rough time of it in the combat and evasive tests. After a smooth start on gentle manoeuvres, the whole crew had been treated with increasing violence by the counter force provided by the inertial dampers. This rather dangerous trend had forced manoeuvres to be curtailed until the cause could be found.

It was finally traced to an incorrect entry in the master ship specifications file the main computer used for all its ship-related calculations. Apparently, after comparing it to an independent copy held in the Engineering computer banks, it was found that the mass of the ship in the master file was ten thousand metric tons heavier than its actual value. During plain sailing and smooth manoeuvres this hadn’t mattered much, but the computer was compensating for too much mass in the generators designed to cancel out g-forces. Now that those adjustments had been made and checked out, it was time to try again.

And that’s why we’re here, after all, Andrea reflected. To wring out these little bugs before we get into a for-real situation where one little bug could mean the death of us all.

"Roll the ship, Lieutenant Brown," Bates commanded. "Starboard rotation, slowly at first then spin us as fast as you can."

"Aye, Captain," she replied, powering up the attitude thrusters. Slowly at first, resisting the mass of the ship, the small thrusters pushed the port side of the ship up and the starboard side down. To the people on the ship nothing amiss was noted, but as the roll accelerated the picture on the bridge viewscreen was starting to make Markus turn slightly green. He turned to his station, just as the captain noticed and ordered, "Tactical on main screen, Mr. Bertschinger."

The science officer complied and the spinning starscape-and-planet was replaced by a composite image of local space, showing the Illustrious on a straight course but spinning like a top.

"Maximum rotation on x-axis achieved, Captain," Andrea reported from the helm.

"Very good. Chief Rockford, how are the systems handling the strain?" Bates asked the bridge engineering liaison.

"As you can no doubt tell, Captain, the dampers are working correctly now," the forty-year-old New Yorker replied with a slight grin for his friend the captain. "The momentum is being absorbed fully, and all indicators show systems within tolerance levels."

"Excellent. So far, so good then," Bates commented. "Mr. Brown, cease our rotation and realign us with the galactic plane."

"Yes sir," the Scot replied, finding and locking in her points of reference as she slowed the ship’s spinning. "Straight and level, sir."

"Very good. Now perform an Immelmann Turn," Bates ordered.

Andrea blinked. What the hell is that? I’ve never heard of such a thing! Risking a glance behind her, she asked, "Sir? I don’t understand."

Adding to her confusion, the captain smiled. "Very good, Lieutenant."

"Sir?"

"You know enough to ask when you don’t know something. What’s more, you did it right away instead of trying to fake it or pretend you knew," he explained.

Andrea was caught between a ‘harumph’ and a blush: annoyed at being tested and slightly embarrassed at the praise.

"An Immelmann Turn is a half loop to face back the way you came, then rolling the ship to its previous orientation. Go ahead and try it, Lieutenant."

"Aye sir." Andrea worked her controls and completed the manoeuvre smoothly, if slowly.

"Good, now do it at full impulse in the shortest possible time," he instructed before opening an intraship com channel. "All hands, secure for combat manoeuvres." Then, "Go ahead, Lieutenant."

Thus began the first real work--and all-out fun--Andrea had yet experienced aboard ship. Over the next three hours she performed standard and non-standard orbital insertions around planets of various sizes and hazards, in-system warp jumps with the now finely tuned warp engines, calculated and implemented intercept vectors, performed various evasive and combat manoeuvres, and basically flung the little cruiser and her 360 souls all over the starry sky and around the whole system.

All through the various trials and tasks set to her she maintained a calm, professional demeanour--a real one this time--even though inside she was cheering and yelling her head off.

This is what it’s all about! she exulted as the Illustrious completed another in-system warp jump, coming out in near orbit of planet s1022-VI. This is what I joined up for, what I was born to do!

Aloud she announced, "Approaching the gas giant, Captain."

"Very good. Take us away from the planet, one quarter impulse, and into the rings, Lieutenant."

"Aye sir," she acknowledged. Given at the start of this shift, that order would have given her pause. As it was now, she eagerly spurred her charge onwards.

"Orient us ninety degrees to the ecliptic on our port side, Mr. Brown."

"Yes, Captain." Several seconds later and the ship was flying on the left edge of her saucer as seen from the galactic plane. "Entering the rings in three minutes, sir."

"Very good. Your task this time, Mr. Brown, is to pilot your way through the lateral extent of the rings without disturbing anything!" Bates told her.

"Sir, there’s no way I can do that! There are megatons of fine debris and dust--" she protested before the captain gently cut her off.

"Understood, Lieutenant. Just try to avoid the larger hunks of rock then, okay?" he said with a smile.

Damnit, another test! she cursed mildly, but then smiled back. "Ah, I’ll try, Captain."

Bates’ cheeks seemed to be doing a little dance as he said, with a mostly straight face, "See that you do, Lieutenant."

"Entering ring dust cloud boundary," Markus reported from the science station. "Reading particle concentration at one part per thousand cubic kilometres. Particle density increases geometrically beyond this point."

"Thank you, Mr. Bertschinger," Bates acknowledged.

"Particle density now at one part per ten cubic kilometres," Markus stated after a few more seconds.

"Now entering the rings, Captain," Andrea announced. "Beginning evasive manoeuvres."

"Particle density now at two parts per cubic kilometre."

"Navigational deflectors are handling the load, Captain," Chief Rockford updated. "Beams correctly configured for one-quarter impulse."

"Very good, Chief," Bates acknowledged as he watched a fairly large boulder disappear off to port. There were plenty more to take its place.

"Particle density at ten parts per cubic kilometre."

"Easy does it, Mr. Brown," Bates commented as he watched the screen’s point of view gently weave a path through the rings.

Andrea was concentrating hard, but still managing to enjoy herself at this test of skill.

That enjoyment ended abruptly.

WHAM!

The ship staggered, yawing to starboard as a specific alarm started blaring. Andrea fought to right the ship from its sideways skid through the thickening dust cloud as Rockford raced to the damage control station. "Hull breach!" he yelled for the newbies.

Bates already knew this and yelled, "Shields up, Yellow Alert! All stop and thrusters to station-keeping!"

With no one at the weapons console Garn slammed a hoof onto his shield activation button as Andrea zeroed her controls.

"Shields coming up, Captain!" he growled, managing to cover his nervousness.

"Answering all stop, Captain!" Andrea barked, not doing quite so well.

Donally burst onto the bridge in full uniform and ready for action. "All sections, report your status to the First Officer on the bridge," she ordered down an intraship com channel.

"Chief Rockford, what can you tell me?" Bates asked.

"Sir, we’ve got a hull breach and explosive decompression on D Deck inboard of the sensor array, both VIP quarters. Emergency force fields and bulkheads are in place. No other damage detected, sir."

"Very good," he said then switched his attention to his XO. "Commander, report."

Donally straightened up and turned to face the captain. "Sir, all other sections check in as secure, no damage. We were apparently hit in only that one spot. Sickbay is reporting no casualties, so we’ve gotten off lightly. No one was in the area of the breach."

Well, we aren’t carrying any VIPs, fortunately, Bates noted. "Okay, now I want to know what happened to us. We don’t move until we know we are not in danger of it happening again," he announced. "Science Officer, full sensor scan. Chief Rockford, run systems diagnostics and get a damage control team in there to assess the affected areas and set about repairing it."

The acknowledgements echoed back as Bates beckoned Donally over for a conference.

"Situation, Captain?" she asked.

"Helm trials. I was having Lieutenant Brown take us through the rings of the gas giant. All other helm operations had gone perfectly and Brown seems to be a natural there. We’d entered the ring several minutes previously, then all of a sudden this happens," he updated his XO. "Out of nowhere, too. No sensor warnings, no collision alarms, or even proximity warnings. Even the viewscreen showed no object of decent size close by."

"Shields?" she asked.

"Down at the time, up now."

"Navigational deflectors?"

"Online and active. Believe me, Commander, with the particle densities young Bertschinger was reporting we’d have felt a lot more than we did if the deflectors were offline."

Eileen was analysing the situation furiously. "That leads me to believe there may be a problem with them, sir. If we felt only a single impact..." She trailed off to let the captain draw his own conclusions.

"I see what you mean," Bates nodded thoughtfully.

"Incoming scan report, Captain," Lieutenant Bertschinger called out.

"Let’s hear it, Lieutenant," Bates ordered.

"No other ships or manufactured objects detected within range of the sensors, Captain," the Swiss began. "No traces or residue from any known weapons’ fire. No gravitational distortions or fluctuations recorded from the start of this shift, and no objects larger than fifteen centimetres across or massing more than ten kilos detected within a seven-hundred metre radius of our current position, none of which are in our path, Sir."

"Very well, thank you Science Officer," Bates acknowledged. Speaking quietly to his first officer, he stated, "Well, I think that’s the first step in confirming your hypothesis, Commander. We weren’t attacked, knocked off course by gravitational eddies, nor hit by a rock our deflectors couldn’t handle."

"It does seem that way, Captain," she said seriously, then spoke up. "Chief Rockford, progress on damage assessment?"

"They’re just on their way in now, Commander," Rockford informed her. "Lieutenant Ronka and his team have suited up and sealed off the corridor section outside the VIP staterooms. Manually opening the doors to the foremost room. They’re inside and the lights are functioning."

Rockford was obviously getting a running commentary from the Damage Control Officer, so Bates ordered, "Put the Lieutenant on the speakers, Chief. I want to hear him directly."

"Aye sir. On speakers."

The naturally gruff voice of the Tellarite was rendered somewhat loud and tinny in the confines of his helmet’s comm. system, but he was easily understandable.

"Captain," he greeted his CO. "I’m looking around now. There’s the usual mess decompression leaves behind, but the room is mostly intact. Furnishings have been dragged forward slightly, but there wasn’t enough volume of air for a sustained gust."

Bates almost barked at him in frustration but held silent. The lieutenant was only doing his job. Just move it along, Ronka. I don’t want an interior décor critique, I want to know how big a hole is in my ship!

"Moving forward to the hulled bulkhead now, Captain," the Tellarite said next, as if he’d heard Bates’ thoughts. "Okay, there’s a ten centimetre hole in the forward bulkhead. Looks like an unsupervised extra viewport was put in, it lines up so neat," Ronka put in with his gallows humour.

Goddammit Lieutenant, that’s my ship you’re talking about! Bates mentally upbraided him, but at the same time he realised he’d gotten what he wanted and felt some relief at the apparently minor nature of the breach.

"Tricorder readings indicate no additional stress on the bulkhead, it was a sudden, clean punch through. This will be easily fixed."

"Lieutenant," a female voice came onto the speakers, "I’ve got a five centimetre hole in the aft bulkhead leading into the second VIP cabin. Another clean punch through with no caving or stress fractures around it. This’ll be easy to fix as well," the second member of Ronka’s team reported.

"Thanks Al`dena," the Tellarite acknowledged. "David, what’ve you got?"

"Sir, I’m in the second VIP cabin and I’ve found our culprit."

Everyone on the bridge turned to the speakers at that little announcement.

"You’ve what?" Ronka blustered in disbelief. "Say again."

"Sir, I have a roughly spherical object about three millimetres across that the tricorder tells me is almost pure iron embedded in the far wall of the second VIP cabin. It’s almost all the way through the wall into the Rec. Deck galley, but it’s forming its own airtight plug," Ronka’s second helper confirmed in a somewhat awe-struck tone. "Fortunately for the cooks next door it doesn’t look like it’s going anywhere soon."

"Uh, okay." The bridge crew could almost hear Ronka shake his head to clear it. "Right, I want a repair team on each ruptured bulkhead and I want both brought up to original full-strength structural integrity before we go after David’s plug. Snap to it, people," the engineer finished. Addressing Bates again, Ronka stated, "Captain, we still have full structural integrity and manoeuvring capability. As you heard, the damage is quite specific and highly localised."

"Thank you, Lieutenant. Keep me informed of the progress of your repairs. Captain out." He closed that channel and opened another to the engineering spaces. "Lieutenant Commander Saran."

Seconds later the calm, modulated tones of the Vulcan chief engineer spilled out onto the bridge. "Saran here, Captain."

"You were monitoring Lieutenant Ronka’s team, Commander?" he asked. "And our sensor data?"

"Affirmative, Captain," was the short reply.

"Do you concur with our theory that there’s a misalignment in one navigational deflector array, probably the starboard emitter?"

"I do, Captain, and I have already dispatched a diagnostics team to locate the problem," he replied. "However, I am currently at a loss to explain why current safety and diagnostic routines are unaware of this error."

"You’re not the only one," Bates muttered under his breath, and was subsequently surprised to hear Saran respond.

"It is gratifying to know that I am not alone in considering this problem, sir."

After the tenseness of the last few minutes and the relief brought on by Ronka’s report, most of the bridge crew couldn’t help a smile at that.

"Ah, very well, Lieutenant Commander. Keep me informed of your progress and let me know when we can move again."

"Sir, we can move now," the Vulcan protested. "With the shields up the navigational deflectors automatically cut off and--"

"Thank you, Mr. Saran," Bates overrode him, voice firm. "Captain out," he finished and closed the channel. I really wish Vulcans would take up colloquialisms, idioms, and even a slight sense of humour like the Tellarites and Andorians do, he lamented internally. Instead he turned his attention to his navigator and asked, "Shield status, Ensign Garn?"

"Holding at 99% of full strength, Captain. The dust cloud is reforming around us because of the rotation of the rings and this is constantly abrading the shields."

An admirably complete report, if more information than I was looking for, Bates noted. "Very well. We all heard our Chief Engineer, so if you would, Mr. Brown, find the shortest route back out of the rings and take us out at one quarter impulse power."

"Aye-aye, Captain," she replied, sounding ill-at-ease. Due to the depth of the rings that course was a simple 180-degree turn to go back the way they came in, so she gently turned the ship around at 100 kps.

"Chief Rockford, boost shield power to 150% until we get clear of the dust. Mr. Bertschinger, call out when we’re clear."

"Aye Captain," Rockford acknowledged.

"Yes sir," Markus echoed.

The turn complete, Andrea carefully accelerated the ship up to one-sixteenth light-speed. Bates noticed that the young woman seemed to be walking on eggshells, making every movement with exaggerated care. She probably still feels responsible for us getting hit, even though it looks like it wasn’t her fault. I’ll have to speak to her later, he decided.

After five minutes Markus called the all clear and Bates relaxed minutely again. "Standard orbit of the gas giant, Mr. Brown," he ordered next.

"Aye sir."

"Mr. Bertschinger, full spectrum sensor sweep of the planet and its rings. I want a detailed breakdown of its composition and suitability for resource gathering," Bates instructed the science officer. Several other tasks were assigned to the various bridge crewmembers while the captain settled into his chair. And now we wait until Engineering reports back. Might as well keep this bunch occupied until we do.

*****
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First Steps - Chapter Six, Pt III
« Reply #36 on: July 12, 2005, 07:14:37 am »
And here's the conclusion of Chapter Six. Read, enjoy, discuss and comment. Let me know what you think, because remember: feedback is Manna to a writer. What did I do right/wrong? What did you like/dislike? Who do you like/dislike? Lay it on me, I want to know.


Chapter Six, Pt III

It took nearly two hours and Bates was getting quite tired, having been up since 0700 that morning and been on duty continuously until now. It was not an emergency or urgent situation so he had no adrenaline to keep him going and his fifteen-hour workday was beginning to take its toll.

Seated in the briefing room on B Deck with his Exec, Chief Engineer, Lieutenant Ronka, and Ensign Alicia Rio, he was now getting an explanation on what happened and how, and how it had been fixed.

"...so, the misalignment of emitters five and six in the starboard side deflector array created an open channel, a wedge if you will, with its apex at the place we were hulled," Ensign Rio was saying. "At this ‘point’ the wedge was twenty centimetres wide, but at its furthest extent it opened up to two hundred metres. We’ve been very lucky, sirs," she continued, "to be hit by only one particle. We could have been hulled from amidships through to the stern had we been going any faster, or if there’d been more particles, or even just a single bigger one. Its contact with the deflector beams on each side of the channel robbed the particle of a lot of its momentum too, as it was converted to lateral motion each time it was forced out of the side of the beams. It stopped the particle having a straight line run at us, which also would have ripped a hole through the length of the ship." Alicia sighed, and added a final thought. "I dread to think what would have happened if the deflector misalignment had opened a wedge outboard of the sensor housing. It would have hit the Rec. Room and vented those three decks out into space, probably with a goodly number of our people."

"That didn’t happen, though, Ensign," Donally snapped. "There is no point in dreaming up disaster situations just to frighten yourself with."

Ensign Rio did look chastised by the XO’s words, Bates noted, but there was a slight flash of resentment at being shot down so thoroughly in such exalted company.

"Sorry, Commander," she offered. "Anyway, the gap has been closed. This won’t happen again."

"So you claim, Ensign. How can you be sure if the diagnostics were faulty to start with?" Donally asked her pointedly.

The Engineering Diagnostics Officer suppressed her irritation at the XO’s question and answered, "Commander, the initial problem was more faulty data entry by the yard techs. They input the wrong deflection angle into the emitter control software but the right one into the diagnostic program. Two teams probably did this at very different times during the ship’s refit, therefore even their own simulations and diagnostics were faulty. The difference was only a single degree, but space flight is a very precise science. We’ve just experienced the results of what happens when some yard contractor doesn’t take things seriously enough to triple-check all their work. All it takes is a moment’s distraction and some time later several hundred people die a mysterious death in a perfectly good ship."

That thought sent cold shivers down all but the Vulcan’s spine, and even he looked concerned.

"That’s what shakedowns are for, Ensign. That’s why they take a minimum of three months," Bates commented. "I’ll make a recommendation to Starfleet Command to have all specifications files held on ship to be cross-checked with and compared to one another to prevent these... stupid errors costing people their lives. Thank you for your sterling efforts, Ensign, that was good work by you and your team."

She nodded her acknowledgement, and changing gears he moved on. "Now, Lieutenant Ronka, how go your repairs?"

The Tellarite had been preparing for this moment, and dropped what he’d been holding onto the table. It landed with a loud, solid thunk and rolled slightly. "100% complete, Captain," he stated dramatically, enjoying the looks on the humans’ faces. He added, "However, the interior of the two VIP cabins need some..." Now, what was that human phrase? he wondered. Ah yes. "...some ‘room service’ to return them to their former glory."

Bates suppressed a grin and noticed Ensign Rio doing likewise. Saran gave no reaction, as expected, but Donally glared at the Tellarite--also as expected.

"Lieutenant Ronka, this is not a laughing matter," Bates said mildly, pre-empting his XO’s outraged barrage.

Ronka was instantly sombre. "Of course not, sir. I did not mean to imply otherwise."

How can a furry, porcine being look like the picture of innocence? Bates wondered with an internal smile, before ordering, "Your report, Lieutenant."

"Sir, all three bulkheads have been repaired fully, as has the outer hull surface," he stated. "The repaired sections have been subjected to a full battery of heat and pressure tests and have passed them easily. Commander Saran has confirmed those findings. Even the exterior hull plate has been painted."

"Thank you, Lieutenant. Good job. So, we are up to full strength once again, Mr. Saran?"

"Yes, Captain. The damage has been fully and properly repaired, the deflector arrays have all been thoroughly and exhaustively checked and confirmed as properly aligned, and the datafiles for the diagnostics routines have been examined and corrected to actual settings where necessary," the Vulcan confirmed. "I also took the liberty of likewise checking the secondary deflectors on the upper raised hull surfaces. They also are now fully calibrated and certified."

"Excellent work, Commander. You all have my thanks." Heads nodded around the table. "Commander Donally, you will instruct the Second Officer to assume command and continue the shakedown. Have all datafiles compared and cross-checked with unequivocal data so that something of this nature is never repeated. I am now going to inform our helm officer that she didn’t run into anything and that she can stop worrying, and then I am going to bed. The rest of you may return to your posts. Carry on and good night."

"Aye sir," "Goodnight sir," the acknowledgements came back.

I wonder what else we’ll find over the next few weeks? Leo thought as he headed up to the bridge. Hopefully nothing this serious will happen again, but you never know. We can only hope.
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Re: First Steps
« Reply #37 on: July 12, 2005, 07:47:06 pm »
I'm not good at reviewing flaws and merits of writing.  I know if I like it though.  I really like it.

I like our recent trend of not telling the epic story of a cruiser captain / admiral and his defeat of the Hydran / Orion / Klingon battle force.  These smaller scale stories, even La'ra's because it's about the characters, are fun to read.
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Re: First Steps
« Reply #38 on: July 13, 2005, 02:46:52 am »
`MMM.... I still don't like Donally. And allthough I liked it in the story, I now wonder the possibility of that grave of an error by the techies in the yard. Somehow they should have known this could happen and checked. But then again, we make quatasrophic errors now as well so why not in the future too?

Anyways, it was a good read. Now gimme more
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Re: First Steps
« Reply #39 on: July 13, 2005, 07:24:52 am »
Thanks you two, your comments are very much appreciated. Rest assured, more is coming.

In a few days.  :P

Now the rest of you: Get off your butts and comment! This is meant to be a mutual admiration society here, give to receive and all that.  :thumbsup:
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