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Re: #14: Relaunch
« Reply #30 on: November 16, 2007, 09:13:16 pm »
It's just cuz she wants you, Grim.  She's trying to get your attention.
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Re: #14: Relaunch
« Reply #31 on: November 16, 2007, 10:22:45 pm »
Alrighty...now things get interesting.

BTW...how's the editting been so far. Horrid mistakes? [Andy can't be the one answering this one...]






CH. 6






Lieutenant Commander Rathus Slik stood rigid and watched as the junior officer manning the main sensor console went about their relayed orders. Endeavour’s sensors scoured the orbital area of the planet Jobia, looking for any spaceborne weapons platforms that might exist. Both these officers seemed proficient. Both seemed well versed in their duties and diligent.

They were also scared to death of him.

Slik found this entertaining. Such fears and apprehension were supposedly far behind the races of the enlightened Federation. Such rubbish. Primal fear among primate species in the presence of large reptilian creatures was hardwired into the brain. These Earthers thought themselves so far removed from their animal beginnings. Such thought was as foolish as it was counter productive.

The Gorn officer stepped back out of their perceptual range and leaned against the tactical console. The weapons officer did not fear him so much. He smelled little fright within Nechayev. No, more the lieutenant felt great loathing and hostile feelings for Slik. His every sense was attuned to Slik’s movements and actions. Daniel Nechayev would cooperate with the Gorn. He would follow his orders. But the weapons officer very much wanted a reason to harm Commander Slik.

Since his coming to the Federation and being sponsored into Starfleet, Slik had not encountered such a negative force directed his way. For some reason, the gunner hated him. Likely hated all Gorn. He decided that he’d devote some research to Nechayev’s past to discover the reason for such animosity. Curiosity ate at the commander every time he thought about the weapons officer and the smell that emanated from him.

“Commander.” One of the sensor officers piped up. Rathus’s attention refocused on the science console.

“Yes?”

“We have yet to detect any space weapons of any kind. However, there are twelve nuclear armed vehicles traveling at supersonic velocity on a southerly heading.” The youngest, golden haired male told him.

“Course?”

“Indeterminate as yet, sir.” There was hesitation in the young one’s response. “But the rocketry field is close by the projected flight path the craft are currently on. If they angle their path toward the field, they will be over it inside fifteen minutes.”

Slik turned, paying the sensor officers and tactical no further attention, and descended to the conn. His long, clawed talon tapped the intercom controls. “Transporter rooms! Reaffirm your lock on the landing parties!”

“Aye, sir.”

Another tap to the controls.

“Commodore Ford, this is Lieutenant Commander Slik. Respond, please.”





Ford’s comm buzzed silently in his oversized pocket, the movement alerting him to the call. He withdrew the device carefully and withdrew into a recess built into the wooden wall behind him. There were about fifty observers up here on the platform now. Talking on a wireless device now would definitely arouse suspicion. “Ford.”

“Commodore, this is Slik. We have detected a large squadron of heavily armed nuclear bombers en route to your general location. I suggest egress.”

Ford looked up to his fellow officers. They nodded that they’d understood the message. As a whole, they turned to head back to the stair that had brought them here. The building flow of spectators was growing thicker by the passing second. As the launch time approached, many were seeking a good place to view the spectacle. The CO grimaced, holding his communicator low as he stepped in behind Goodwin to cover his use of alien tech. “Egress may be difficult. A crowd’s drawing in this area. How long till arrival of aircraft?”

“Fourteen minutes, sir.”

Ford clapped the antennae down on the comm and tucked it away. He had no idea how long it would take to reach a safe area for beam out. He wished for the millionth time for Sharp’s renowned ‘Sixth Sense’ for danger. It had saved unknown hundreds of landing parties from just this sort of calamity. While the commodore had expected a war to eventually break out among these people, he’d figured on more of a warning than this.

The landing party moved ahead with all due swiftness, pushing their way at times through the thickening crowd. The observers seemed confused that anyone would want to leave this strategic viewing area. Some pushed back against the crew, rudely spitting insults at them. At last they reached the head of the wooden stair. The path down was all but blocked off. Some of the kinder individuals made a way for them along one side. The party was able to escape the platform level one at a time, with Ford bringing up the rear.

Three minutes were thusly lost.





Slik leaned close, his earlier amusement and the cause for it momentarily lost to the crisis. The techs sitting side by side before him had all but tuned out his presence and acknowledged him only as a senior and the officer of the deck. The Gorn commander watched as the icon on his screens shifted and slowly advanced on the nation who prepared to launch their rocket skyward. Due to the upload from Surall’s tricorder and their own sensor sweep of the rocket field, Endeavour’s crew was well aware of the existence of fission weaponry in Ford’s location.

New telemetry was beginning to spring up along the border zone.

“I think the southern nation has gone on the alert, Commander.” The senior of the technicians told Slik. “I read aircraft launches from several airfields and ground based ordnance becoming mobile. I’m also getting more fission signatures!”

“Details?” Rathus asked.

“Field cannon…heavy bore.” The kid read from the screen. The young officer was not familiar with primitive artillery. He was having to report only what the computer told him. This process was slower than what an experienced, knowledgeable officer could render. “Nuclear shell-cased projectiles. Projected yield 500 kilotons.”

“They attempt to defend themselves.” Rathus commented. He privately wished them luck. Their success in defending themselves would safeguard the CO and his people. These details were now being fed to the tricorders of the ground teams. Perhaps they might find it useful should they actually have the time to read it.

“The aircraft are splitting up!” The most youthful of the pair of tech’s reported. She pointed to the craft depicted on the screen. The vessels were indeed taking divergent routes to their targets. They were flying in pairs, their speed nearly twice that of sound. “Two units are bearing for Commodore Ford’s position…with another two still capable of rerouting to strike there as well.”

“Redundancy…” Slik muttered further. His refractive eyes turned to another monitor, one showing the transponder markers for Ford’s landing party. His group had yet to leave that building. Should he be forced to, Slik was not above abandoning the Prime Directive and beaming his crew out in full view of every primate down there. The transporter rooms were on hot standby, awaiting his order.

“Antiaircraft fire now opening along the border region. Interceptor fighters closing on first two flights of bombers.” The two continued to report.

“Shall I go to alert status?” Nechayev asked the deck officer.

Slik turned around languidly. He’d nearly tuned out the very existence of the remainder of the bridge crew. Both Lieutenants Nechayev and Bronstien were staring intently his way. The weapons officer did so with obvious distaste. Rathus considered the suggestion.

“Indeed, Lieutenant. Sound Yellow Alert, but leave deflectors down for swift transport purposes.”

“Aye.”

Slik looked back to the helmsman who smelled of artificial prosthetics. The youngling seemed very attuned to the disposition of the parties on the ground. He’d likely served with these people for some time. Primates developed such overstated attachments. Slik cocked his head and returned his own view to the array of screens before him at science.

“Bombers have breached the first barrier of AA guns, Commander.” The tech was reporting further. “Aircraft are far too high up to be hit by those guns. I’m not reading guided ground to air weaponry. One intercept squadron now coming into weapons range of bomber unit three…”

The battle began to ensue on the main monitor. Slik half watched it unfold while continuing to glance at the ground team’s signatures. They had parted themselves from the observatory and were halted behind it. The number of lifesign indicators in the area was increasing by the second. The whole collection of aliens within the field was converging on that one building.

“Border cannon are opening fire on the northern country, Commander!” The young female reported, jabbing a pale finger to the indicators. “They’re firing their nukes!”





Commander Davenport slowed to a trot as he and his party emerged from the last in a long series of alleyways. They had left the tavern and their stunned policemen far behind. They were nearly across town from their starting point and well out of immediate danger. The XO paused to take stock of his two team members. Both were short of breath after their breakneck run, but no worse for wear. Neither was injured.

Montoya was looking straight at him and speaking. He could barely hear the slightest of mumbles from her. She wasn’t shouting for all to hear, thankfully. He probably still wouldn’t have understood her if she had been. He silenced her futile attempts by pointing to his ear and shaking his head.

Ronald took a slow look around their surroundings, careful to watch for witnesses. This mission was no longer viable given the police interest in them and the apparent war footing these people were on. Finding no one within the immediate vicinity, he drew out his command flipped it open. The familiar tingle of the transporter field took him just as his finger found the control to signal recall. Someone on the other end had had the same idea.

The blue glow of subspace energy enfolded around the away team and deposited them back within the semi-dark confines of Endeavour’s transporter room. Ron glanced at his people, who were now positioned behind him, and then nodded to the transport operator. The middle-aged woman at the controls was saying something to him. He couldn’t help but wince out a smile. This was going to be an entertaining next few minutes…





Ford and party halted and tried not to seem desperate to leave as the seven, armed men appeared at the edges of the gathering crowd of guests flocking around the observation center. The men before them were arrayed in full combat gear, green fatigues and helmets. They had semi-automatic rifles in hand and stern looks upon their faces. Those among the crowd who noticed the soldiers looked back and forth with confusion. An alarm soon began to wail in the distance.

“Ladies and gentlemen!” The senior among the Jobian soldiers began to address the now concerned mass. “A condition of emergency now exists at this field! The Tadikad Affiliation has launched a strike on this installation and we are now all in danger! You will follow us as directed to the on-base bomb shelter. You must move quickly and orderly! Please, move this way!”

The soldier pointed off to a long row of green painted buildings with a heavy, reinforced concrete foundation. The murmuring of the crowd began to increase dramatically as their course was changed and they were herded toward this area of safety. Ford looked about quickly for an easy route toward escape for he and his party. None abounded. More soldiers were being deployed to handle the large number of civilians as they were moved slowly but steadily toward the intended buildings.

Shelter in this structure may or may not be sufficient to avoid injury and rad poisoning from a nuclear strike. Ford did not like the idea of remaining here and trusting to these people’s capacity for construction and the targeting priorities of the enemy. He’d order his people beamed up in the midst of them if he were forced to. His communicator vibrated in his coat. Hunkering close behind Mister Goodwin and Smith, he answered it.

“Ford, go ahead!”

“Commodore, the XO’s position has been shelled by ballistic cannon firing nuclear ordnance.” Commander Slik told him. “I ordered his immediate transport prior to impact. They were extracted well before the attack struck.”

“The reactor?”

“Being hit now. Projections show the entire area will be destroyed, including the nearby town. The airforce of the southern nation is having little success in bringing down the supersonic bombers en route to you. You now have four minutes to make your exit.”

“If we don’t make it away from the crowd in time, you initiate transport, Mister Slik. I don’t like the Prime Directive well enough to be a wall shadow!”

“Understood, sir. Endeavour out.”

Chevis looked up and about once more as he put away his communicator. One of the Jobian women nearest him had overheard most of what he’d told Slik and was staring wide-eyed as they jostled along with the masses. Ford shot her a sad smile and turned away. He hoped very much that the woman would still be alive an hour from now. “I think we’re probably just gonna have witnesses to our extraction,” he told his crew.

Lieutenant Surall turned half around to look back to her commander. “That is unfortunate, but hardly avoidable at this point. I don’t believe there will be any survivors to report our mysterious disappearance.”

“Why?”

“The concrete comprising the structure we’re being guided toward is inferior. It will collapse under the stress and heat of a nuclear detonation above four hundred kilotons. Endeavour’s computers report the devices used by the northern forces to be in excess of half a megaton.”

The commodore panned the crowd visually and swallowed. There were nearly a thousand people within easy view of him. More within the near buildings and about the rocketry platform. Most of them were going to die, while he and his crew beamed away to safety. It was a sobering thought. There was no transporter room waiting far above to take these victims away from their deaths.

The Starfleet team continued on, slowing as the crowds bunched up and pressed into the shelter. They had just over a minute left till Armageddon came calling.


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Re: #14: Relaunch
« Reply #32 on: November 16, 2007, 10:25:56 pm »


“Commander Slik! One of the aircraft approaching the Commodore’s position has opened it bomb bay doors… They are preparing to deploy weapons.”

Rathus approached closer to the command sensor station and peered down on the graphics being displayed on the tactical monitors. That plane was maintaining its formation with the aircraft beside it, and they’d out paced their pursuers with superior speed. There did not appear to be any malfunction within the bomber. No… They intended to drop their ordnance earlier than expected. What was their new target?

“What lies directly before them?” He asked the officers. The male tech panned his sensor scope over the terrain till a wide group of buildings became evident before his eyes. He looked back to the Gorn commander with shock.

“There’s a medium sized city between them and the rocket field, sir!”

Behind Slik, Lieutenant Nechayev stirred.

“Commander, if they drop their veapons vhile our team is on the surface, ve may be unable to retrieve them vith the transporters!”

Gamma radiation and sharp EM discharges disrupted most forms of transporter technology on a wide scale. Slik headed back to the conn and the intercom controls there. “Transporter rooms! Beam in the Commodores team immediately—“

“Too late!”

Slik whirled about to look to science. A great pulse of light was evident in the path of the planes passing over that city. They’d dropped two weapons on the city. He glared back down at the intercom panel. “Transport now!”

“Energizing, Commander!” Came the response on the other end of the comm. “It’s going to be rough!”





Chief Petty Officer Lori McColluck worked her hands over the transport control panel before her. She was already beginning to perspire undetectably about the collar. The electromagnetic burst had already blanketed the area about the rocket field, twelve kilometers distant from the blast. The subspace buffer assembly was slow to react amid the interference and the computer was advising her to abort the cycle.

She’d never get a better chance than this to bring the Skipper in.

Once the Gamma radiation emission reached the beam up sight, she’d lose the landing party. She had to get them home now. If the beam would only maintain solidity for another four seconds!

“Gamma radiation surge detected!” The feminine sound of the ship’s main computer said, it’s tone one of detached indifference. Lori cursed vehemently. The side doors to the transporter room parted as her most immediate senior officer entered at a trot.

“What’s going on!” Ensign Timier asked. The Rodelian junior officer skidded to a halt within the transport control booth and moved close to assist the CPO.

“Gamma surge. I’m losing the Skipper’s team!”

“Degradation is at 30%. Reset through the buffer and cross circuit to initiator circuit B.”

“Maintain this enhancement profile and I will.” Freed of the tedious demands of manually operating the landing team’s pattern within the transport grid, McColluck moved to the rear control panel in the pod and accessed the main buffer interface. There she began to manipulate the rerouting controls that would shunt the beam from one emergency system to another.

“Cross-circuiting to B!” She told Timier.

The machinery beneath the deck before the transporter alcove groaned and charged anew as the system redoubled its efforts to bring home the CO’s team. The transporter began to generate a diffuse glow of azure energy over two of the pads. Timier glanced back at the Petty Officer, fear evident in her yellow eyes. “Two of the signatures are undergoing severe signal degradation. If we fall below 65% we’ll have to reverse the cycle.”

“If we do that, two people are going to be dropped back down into a war zone!”

Timier shrugged.

“Better than losing them!”

McColluck shot a glare back to the ensign.

“It might be the same damn thing, sir!”

Timier said nothing further. Both knew what might have to be done. Neither liked it.

“Transporter Room One, report!” Commander Slik’s serpentine voice demanded above the call of the alarms. Timier looked aside just slightly to address the intercom.

“We’re working on it, bridge. Stand by!”

“We need more buffer resolution!” McColluck shouted out. Her attempts to strengthen the field had all but failed, and were only prolonging the abortion of the entire procedure. “If we can’t stabilize the carrier signal, the patterns will start to degrade!”

Timier shook her spike haired head.

“We’re not going to be able to stabilize the sig—“

“I’m cross-circuiting to A and C!”

“That’s crazy! The EPS array can’t handle it!”

“It’ll buy us time!”

The deck began to shudder with the efforts of the system imbedded in the innards of the ship. The Petty Officer glanced back to the alcove. The two shafts of subspace energy were coalescing, becoming more solid. Humanoid silhouettes were now evident within the transfers. Both were male in form. Nothing could be seen of the other two patterns.

“Transporter Room!” Slik called out again. “Report landing party status!”

“We’re losing them!” Lori shouted at him. Alarms were picking up frequency. Red damage flashers were beginning to paint the room crimson. “We need more power!”

“Transferring EPS control to transporter Room One!” Slik answered.

A bank of control immediately lit and flashed for attention. Under the reproaching eye of Ensign Timier, Lori increased buffer power to more than 30% over maximum. The transporter began to scream as its machinery neared overload. Timier looked back to her own panel.

“Signals One and Three are stable. Two and Four are losing pattern resolution!”

“I can get more power—“

“Lori! The grid is overloading!”

“I can do it!”

“I’m finalizing transport on the two we have!” The transport chief turned, nearly ready to strike her superior for overriding her. Her eyes gaped wide as the Rodelian’s blue hands played over the main controls. “Energizing now.”

The two intact patterns became solid and took on their own color as the fields of blue energy faded away and ended. When the field terminated, it left behind CPO Goodwin and Lieutenant Smith in a state of acute confusion. Timier tapped the intercom even as she worked on trying to salvage the remaining two patterns. “Bridge, we have two of them.”

Two circuits blew spectacularly beneath the transporter platform. Both Goodwin and Smith ducked low and ran free of the danger area. Smoke blossomed from the inner workings of the buffer as series upon series of fuses and circuitry lost cohesion. Goodwin bent low just as soon as he cleared the alcove and tore away two access panels to expose the burning workings there. Smith hung back, unnerved.

“Transporters are going down!” McColluck reported.

“Reversing transport now!” Timier replied. She glanced aside as Lori rejoined her there at the main controls. “Where do I put them?”

Lori took over the targeting array.

“Anywhere they aren’t kicking the hell out of each other!”
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Re: #14: Relaunch
« Reply #33 on: November 16, 2007, 11:08:22 pm »
Nuke-firing artillery...bombers obliterating cities with single weapons...feels like a good ol' '60's era 'End of the World' war movie, with no Henry Fonda to negotiate with the other side. ;D

Very fond of several bits of this chapter.  Slik's alien point of view and the way he associates smells and impressions with people rather than their names.  All the detail in regard to the nuclear war breaking out on the surface.  Slik and Ford's 'People first, PD second' attitudes.  The transporter being shown as both fallible and something that can be coaxed, jury-rigged, but still might not work.

Best little bit though was this...

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One of the Jobian women nearest him had overheard most of what he’d told Slik and was staring wide-eyed as they jostled along with the masses. Ford shot her a sad smile and turned away.

His expression and the way you wrote it here says volumes.  We know he can't save all the people who're going to die, probably not even the woman he just locked eyes with.  He knows it, doesn't like it, but prepares to save his crew anyway, but can't help feeling something in regard to what's probably gonna happen.  This line says all that without saying any of it.  Excellent.
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Re: #14: Relaunch
« Reply #34 on: November 17, 2007, 06:48:17 pm »
+K 4 U!!

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« Reply #35 on: November 18, 2007, 12:19:56 am »
As promised.  Thanks for looking at Calyx.  I read the whole thing but stopped nitpicking after the first two parts as I got too engrossed in the story.

I haven't read 1-13, so I don't know if this is part of a series. 

Prologue: It's an interesting beginning to it, but I have a criticism.  The build up to the ship exploding is just a few sentences too long.  I figured it out before it happened, and wasn't surprised by the explosion.

Chapter 1: I read the sentence about the crew turning to smile at Ford and pictured a giant combined being with a hideous giant smile on its face.  Creepy.  Out of yard space to space.  A nit: how about deep space?

Chapter 2: Rex: allover covered.  Isn't all over two words? I like the away mission to the planet.  Tension without being blasted by Klingons as the result is pretty nice to see in ST.

Chapter 3:Yeah, the scenes with the natives here were really good.  I think the scene with Ford and Noah was awkward.  Probably it should have been awkward.  Undetectable sub with a nuclear reactor.  Not likely given the few nuclear power plants on the planet.  Starship sensors should be detecting things in ways modern science can't expect to protect against, especially when those starships were designed by people who went along the same evolutionary path.  Leeway for fiction is allowed.

Chapter 4:  I have nothing to add.  I really liked it. 

Chapter 5:  I've got it figured out.  But that was exciting adn confusing.  As it should be.

Chapter 6: I love pathos.  And a good shift in where the tension is to remind us that the story is about the starfleet people not the world that just blew itself to hell.

Having read it all at once, I was struck by the parity between the events of the prologue and the events of the story.  How is the Federation so different in making a preemptive strike on an enemy battleship any different from the one nation launching a preemptive bombing raid on an enemy nuclear facility?
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« Reply #36 on: November 18, 2007, 12:32:24 pm »
Post Apocalyptic is one of my favorite themes. Another would be those leading up to the end (which is why I really liked the Fallout game series (even that lame wad PS2 attempt to cash in on the name (it was someone else's game, so I didn't mind playing it too much)) and the Terminator trilogy. I own what is probably the most awesome nuclear war type docudrama, Atomic Cafe; I own a book (sorry I forgot the name, it is still packed!) that covers a lot of nuclear blunders (including K-19, TMI, Chernobyl, etc.), not to mention my personal favorite Crimson Tide (having served on an SSBN, I have to just say "close enough" to that one); and of course, 4+ years on board SSBN/SSGN 727...  In short, I FREAKING LOVE THIS (end of the world) STUFF!!

That being said, this was awesomely written, with a lot of that "will they make it?" suspense. Its just freaking amazing. Seriously.

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Gives you that feeling of "oh, crap" later on when Ford doesn't quite come home. Also  brings up the question, "Does it violate the PD if those that saw died right after?" Some might say yes, I'd go with no.

I wouldn't be too surprised if some of those "undetected" nuclear subs became detected soon, either launching ICBMs, or their own nuclear tipped torpedoes (again, assuming a parallel with 60's Earth). While Slik and company might not be too interested in marking the occurrence, I'm pretty sure Endeavor's sensors will make a nice and neat little recording for our good Commodore's later perusal. Assuming, of course, he does come back.

I don't recall if I said this before or not, but it is a nice change of pace from the Ya'weenies.

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Re: #14: Relaunch
« Reply #37 on: November 18, 2007, 10:13:14 pm »
Post Apocalyptic is one of my favorite themes. Another would be those leading up to the end

The Guv and I are both big fans of The Bedford IncidentFail Safe was a wee bit overrated, but still enjoyable, and there's always Doctor Strangelove.  Something about Slim Pickens riding an atomic bomb down to it's target while waving his cowboy hat and yelling 'yeee haaa' is just...priceless. ;D
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« Reply #38 on: November 18, 2007, 10:50:04 pm »
Thank you both, and specifically,

Andromeda: I reply to really good Andy comments point by point. So I am prompted to render the same to your own great response.

1] Yeah, this one is part of a series. 1-13 lead up to this one, but this one takes a sharp side-road from the over all plotline. It's one of my 'stop whacking the horse before he really does die' stories.

2] Yeah, I thought it'd be pretty easy to see that the BB was about to blow. Was waiting to see if anyone else thought so.

3] I appreciate the nitpicks for referal purposes, but I did mention that this one was basically uneditted. I spent like 10 minutes glancing over it. I was just not into nitpicking my own stuff that day...

4] On tension without Klingons...Yeah, it is too easy to fall into the trap of over using established Trek badguys. Klingons, Roms, Hydrans, whatever. I do like to dabble.

5] I still hold by the idea of a sub, nuclear or otherwise, being quite hard to trace. I do not hold by infalible tech. There never has been, and never shall be any. After 9/11, a friend said to me "Osama's a dead man, all he has to do is look up and we got him." He's not accounted for, and all those nifty lil' satelites in orbit have not contributed to his capture. I see Osama's tech level versus the USA's being on par with the Jobians versus the UFP (for purposes of comparison, abstract as it may be).

6] Smith and Ford: This was not an easy scene to write. Decided to go with a style, that once I reread it, seemed awkward. Thus was not the original intention, but I went with it because I liked that the flow was disjointed. I think it added to the moment.

7] CH. 4: Woot!

8] CH. 5: Woot Again!!

9] CH. 6: Yeah, there was a great deal of temptation on my part to show too much about the waring natives, rather than the alien intruding in their midsts. There was all sorts of detail I really wanted to use...but none of it had anything to do with the actual telling of the story.

10] While the Federation itslef did not initiate said preeptive strike against Jarn, I am glad that you made the connection you mention. It was not my intent, actually, to make that connection, and I was concerned with the fact that the prologue did not match the rest of the story. Your pointing out the similarities, though, makes me throw that concern right out the window. I DO try to portray the Federation as a benevolent structure, but I also want to show that, in the end, it is still just another big beaurocratic body with all the faults entailed therein. How different are they, indeed?

To theCzar:

1] I also like Apocalyptic tales, and have always been a great fan of Escape from New York. While my own collection does pale before yours, I have a few movies. I also love Crimson Tide, and introduced my wife to said last night. I am an avid fan of the US Navy [and the Brits as well, thought that more goes to the age of sail] and would have loved nothing more than joining the sub service. *looks back with some regrett, but remains glad for all that has happened in the past 10 years anyway...*

2] I'm overjoyed that the suspense factor is good in this one. I canwrite 'suspense' all day, but be unconvinced of it's capacity till some one else reads it. I can't judge what I write for the 'chill factor'. I'm glad it's carrying thru!

3] While I would have loved to use a nuclear sub of the 50s-60's vintage, such was never invisioned for this story. Sorry. Mayhap I'll write you an extra scene for your own enjoyment...

4] Would I kill of the good ol' Commodore? *whistles innocently and looks away from La'ra so as not to make eye contact sinse he all too well knows the answer to THAT one...*

5] I'm glad the diversion from the Ya'wenn is enjoyed. I believe you will still like the next episode, however.

6] About the PD in my realm: While beaurocrats will of course argue the mandates of General Order One till doomsday, I hold that Starfleet Command is run by reasonably intelligent folk. A violation of said in the interests of saving Fleet personnel is not going to get the book thrown at the involved commander or crew unless gross negligence has occured. Besides, I'd say it is better to leave a bunch of bewildered survivors with unbelieveable tales about people being whisked away by blue energy fields than to leave alien corpses behind for said folk to study...




I'm glad y'all enjoyed, and as Rommie said 'was engrossed'. That makes me happy. Thank you too, Rommie, for commenting on this. You held to your promise! + Karma for both of you!! Story #1 is in the topic titled 'A New Story?' just on this page somewhere. The rest are scattered, should you have the time to mess with em...

--thu guv!!
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Re: #14: Relaunch
« Reply #39 on: November 19, 2007, 02:31:16 pm »
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Story #1 is in the topic titled 'A New Story?' just on this page somewhere. The rest are scattered, should you have the time to mess with em...

doesn't Andy collect them all? If not, we should collect everything here. It would be a shame to lose it.

It's just cuz she wants you, Grim.  She's trying to get your attention.

That's scary m8!

Anyways, on topic:
I second most of the comments here, but my favorite scenes where all of Commander Slik's scenes, the war and the last part.

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“Transport now!”

“Energizing, Commander!” Came the response on the other end of the comm. “It’s going to be rough!”
.....
Lori took over the targeting array.

“Anywhere they aren’t kicking the hell out of each other!”

I just love the sense of urgency, the faillability of the transporter "get free out of jail"-tech, the bridge calling in adding tension. Nice one M8. Now gimme more.
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Re: #14: Relaunch
« Reply #40 on: November 19, 2007, 10:39:23 pm »
Incoming!



CH. 7





Commodore Chevy Ford’s world was spinning when the transport cycle finally released he and his party. The first thing to leap into his mind was the realization that his people hadn’t been brought back up to the ship. They were still on terrestrial property. The second was the lack of Mister Smith and Goodwin from their group. Wherever the two of them had ended up, they weren’t within sight in the street he and Surall had beamed into.

The third and final thing to dawn upon the flags officer was the fact that he was, indeed, standing in the center of a very busy road…

“Sir!”

Surall was already in motion, throwing her bulk into the commodore’s back and propelling himself and her out of the path of an on-rushing truck. The vehicle squalled its wheels and locked up its brakes, swerving in an attempt to miss the two of them. The truck skidded up onto a sidewalk; people dashed swiftly out of its way. Ford watched from the other side of the street, gaping at the sight of angry Jobian beginning to point his way.

“We’d better get the hell outta here!” He told his science officer.

“It is highly likely our transport was observed by many in the area.” Surall told him as they two of them turned and took off in a dead run for the alleyway. They charged out of the sight of the on-lookers behind them. A conscientious citizen attempted to bar their escape from the accident they’d caused. This earned him only a body check from the Vulcan woman and a kick in the face when he still tried to tie up Ford’s feet.

The two officers tore down the first left they came to and continued out of harm’s way. Only then did they start to hear the sirens sounding in the distance. Air raid alarms! This town was under attack too!

“Are we still in the same province?” He asked Surall as they came to a rest at the end of a final alley. Surall boldly took her tricorder out from its pocket and made a scan, heedless of witnesses. The few in the area paid them little heed anyway.

“We are within one hundred kilometers of the rocket range. Same country. There are two bombers en route, ETA: seven minutes.”

Ford flipped open his comm.

“Ford to Endeavour, come in!”

“Slik here, Commodore. Are you uninjured?”

Ford’s mind’s eye flashed back to the hood of that truck, earlier.

“Fine. What the hell happened?”

“There was a gamma ray surge in your area during transport. We had to abort half the signals.”

“Can you try again?” There had to be some reason the crew hadn’t already tried to bring them back up. He hoped it wasn’t a permanent reason.

“Negative, Commodore. In trying to stabilize your signal, we damaged the entire EPS grid leading to the transporter system. We have tried to power the cargo unit with no success.”

Now the pair of aliens had drawn attention. Men and women were pointing at the two of them, most with angry faces. These might have just come from the scene of the previous accident. Panicked by the sirens and the general commotion, now they’d centered their anxieties on the strangers. Strangers with odd devices who spoke on high tech radios…

Ford placed a hand over the antennae grid of his communicator set.

“We gotta go!”

Both the Starfleet officers turned and ran away from the massing Jobians. Shouts followed them up the street even as vehicles began to fire up along the sides of the road. Chevy just hoped none of them had a gun…





Commander Davenport was still fingering his left ear when he arrived back on the bridge. The majority of his alien wares were gone, save for the basic vestments of the clothing. His Starfleet jacket was tucked beneath his right arm as he came to a halt on the starboard bow of the control center.

“Report!”

Lt. Commander Slik turned away from the engineering console where he was assessing a damage control board. “Transporters inoperable, XO. Commodore Ford and the science officer remain planetside.”

To accentuate the report, Mister Smith emerged from the opposite turbolift alone. He frowned Ronald’s direction and then made to sit at the communications station. Ron stepped forward and descended into the sunken command section just forward of the helm. Mister Bronstien looked up searchingly at his approach.

“Any word from the Skipper?”

Slik seemed unsure how to answer. He was likely unfamiliar with the term the ship used for their CO. He finally nodded once, turning away from the engineering panel. “The…Skipper… was beamed down into one of the surrounding settlements south of the rocket base. This city is also in danger of an immediate attack. He reported his status as uninjured before he was forced to end contact.”

“Forced? What’s going on?”

“As nearly as we can determine…the Skipper and Lieutenant are having to evade pursuit on the planet surface.”

“Why!”

“Unknown.”

The XO’s eyes glanced to the repair board behind the Gorn officer.

“Estimated time to repair?”

“Indeterminate. The entire EPS array within the transporter matrix has been overloaded. Commander Tolin’s crews are on it, but have yet to render an estimate. Damage seems extensive…”

Ron tapped at both his ears. The damage to his eardrums was repaired, but he still heard after echoes of every syllable. It made listening difficult. He looked again to Bronstien. The kid looked back at him with a certain anticipation…yearning. The Skipper was in trouble and he wanted to do something more than sit on his butt on the bridge high above.

“Mister Bronstien, get down to the hanger decks and see about a shuttle with a transporter. Get the Skipper and Surall back home!”

“Aye, sir!”

Unencumbered by any difficulty with his prosthetic legs, the helmsman rendered his seat to the man at ops and headed for the lift Davenport had just vacated. Ronald felt a slight tingle of dizziness and headed for the conn. He sat there, wondering just how much more could go wrong today.




Doctor Andrea Keller looked up to the two nurses who were talking just outside her office. Had she just heard what she believed she had? The doctor closed the medkit she’d been preparing and strode hurriedly out of her office to catch up with her two subordinates.

“Nurse Tyler, could you repeat what you were just saying,” The British medical officer requested.

The tall, blonde nurse turned and regarded her senior with a curious glance.

“Doctor?”

“What you were just telling Nurse Genkins… About the transporters…”

Tyler came to sudden recognition and nodded. She knew why the CMO was asking.

“The transporters are down. They were trying to beam up our landing party from the surface when a radiation surge scrambled their signals. I was telling Genkins that we need to get anti-rad treatments and the transport trauma field kit—“

“You mentioned names, Nurse…”

“Yes, ma’am. Lieutenant Surall and Commodore Ford were the two they lost. They’re stuck on the planet—“

Keller did not remain to listen to more. She turned away, desensitized and feeling all over numb. The sudden thought that the Commodore, her former lover…was lost on an alien world. Lost on a planet just starting a nuclear war…

Confused and unsettled, the CMO stepped back into her office and out of the sight of her subordinates. All she could think about was him...the fact that he might not be coming back once again.





Johnathan Bronstien walked quickly, if stiffly, out onto the main deck of the dorsal shuttle bay. He glanced about till his brown eyes caught sight of the hanger chief, SCPO Karver. Karver was a large man in his late forties. He’d been in the fleet a good long while, and knew auxiliary craft inside and out. The helmsman made a beeline for him.

“Senior! I need a shuttle with a transporter.”

The balding man turned his direction. The look on his face told the officer he was not going to be in luck today. “No can do, sir. At least not till I fuel one. Only the cargo shuttles and the recon ship have transporters, and most of those are down for maintenance.”

“How long on the easiest?”

“I could get you the Patricia in a half hour. She’s in hanger four and is totally intact. Or I can give you Sanchez in an hour and some change. He’s in hanger one, but we’ve been pulling the plasma regulators per the XO’s order. Take a bit to put him back together.”

Bronstien shook his head. He pointed out to the portside main door.

“I’m gonna be out that motherf*ckin’ door in two minutes.”

“Then you can have either the Burton or one of the pods.”

“I’ll take the Burton. Get her ready.”

“Him, sir. Skipper named him after his Dad.”

“Him, it, whatever. Get it ready.”
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A minute and fifty-one seconds later found Lieutenant Bronstien’s ship passing through the semi-luminous field of energy that held the atmosphere inside the shuttle bay. John applied full impulse power and angled his craft down for the blue and green world below him before he’d even cleared the bulk of the lower saucer hub. The pilot had strapped himself into his seat in preparation for turbulence.

“Shuttle Burton, this is the bridge.” Lieutenant Smith’s voice came loudly over the comm channel. “Coordinates coming through on estimated whereabouts of the Skipper and Surall. Life readings indeterminate. There’s too much radiation to lock in on his transponder, but that should clear when you get closer.”

“I’m pretty sure he’ll see me coming down.” Bronstien responded. This mission was so very against the Prime Directive of non-interference. There would be no hiding this shuttle once it swooped over that town down there. The general populous would see them very clearly. Hopefully they’d take the advanced craft for an enemy vehicle and attribute it to enemy activity rather than alien incursion.

The Burton buffeted upon striking the atmosphere. Johnathan lessened his velocity to a more controlled speed. He had to make it to the Skipper intact. Burning up or crashing on entry would do no one any good. The bow flared to a dull red color as friction built due to his oblique angle of insertion. A tap of two controls brought up the shields. Most of the friction and heat build were abated, but the turbulence increased as air was now being forced to take a wider path around the shuttle.

The planet under John’s craft flattened from a hemisphere to a long, wide horizon of immense proportion. The vibration from the hull began to slacken and the ship sank beneath a grey layer of high level clouds. Just before he lost visibility, a great flash of light caught John’s eye far to starboard.

The Jobians were still nuking the hell out of themselves.

He just hoped he could reach the Commodore and science officer before they wound up among the rising casualty toll.






Ford watched from the hilltop he and Surall had been forced up to just outside the Jobian township. Their pursuers had all but forgotten them, looking back at the on-coming bombers just as the Starfleet officers were. The first of the supersonic craft was slowing; it’s bay doors reeling apart at the bottom of the huge, silver fuselage.
Lieutenant Surall didn’t need her tricorder to know what was coming. “They are preparing to deploy, Skipper.”

Ford looked behind. Cover was slim. The bulk of this hill would provide some relief from the burst, given its distance from the apparent target. It would also stop flying debris. Radiation and thermal effects, however, would likely kill them anyway. “Is there any cover at all?” He asked above the roar of jet engines.

The science officer popped out the scanning head of her tricorder and turned westward with it. Neither could hear the signal emanations of the tiny machine for all the sound from those approaching planes. “There is a shelter of some kind built into the side of this hill. One hundred forty meters, bearing 357.”

“Let’s go!”

The two picked back up into a dead out run. They did not see the first bomber begin its preparatory dive that would assist in getting its payload away quickly. Ford had forgotten his normal lack of physical conditioning. He was running off straight adrenaline. Surall out paced him easily, though, her own form very fit and half his weight and age. They ducked low hanging branches and dashed around tree trunks on their way to where the Vulcan had indicated.

“There, Commodore!” Surall pointed to a wooden building built into the slope of the surrounding embankment. They redoubled their speed. Ford could not help but notice a band of civilians huddled into the doorway of their home about fifty yards west of the hill they traveled across. The family had heard the sound of the incoming bombers and were worriedly scanning the skies. Their structure would not protect them from the blast, let alone the after affects of a nuclear detonation. Ford drew to a halt.

“Those people are gonna be toast!”

Surall considered reminding her CO of the Prime Directive. This would accomplish little, and helping a family with children, to her, far outweighed any conscientious objection General Order One might invoke for the situation. She lowered her tricorder and began to wave with the commodore to them.

The family, three adults and four children, stared back in confusion. One of the women pointed out to the pair of them in and looked back to the others. The children were crying now. The male who seemed to be in charge glared back in obvious mistrust, an obstinate expression glued to his face.

Ford drew his communicator and set its controls to its loudest speaker enhancement.

“If you stay in that house, you’ll be killed!” He shouted over the loudspeaker. “That hillside shed is the only shelter here!”

Snapping his comm shut, Ford took off again, clearing the ground in long strides right behind his lieutenant. This seemed to convince the huddled family. First the eldest female snatched up the two smallest kids and took off after the alien visitors. This compelled the elder man to reassess his earlier sentiments against seeking help. He gave a wave to the remainder of his clan and they began to trek up the slope to catch up with the others.

The sounds of engines suddenly took on a baser note. The first of the two bombers passed over the hilltop, gaining altitude on a steep incline as it struggled to accelerate. Ford watched the craft zoom higher, seeming to barely move due to its size. It bay doors were reeling closed.

The ground shook as though a hammer had struck at their feet. Several of the Jobian family members fell and had to scramble back to their feet. The sky was alight in a hellish glow. Then the overpressure wave hit…

The top of the hill was shorn off in a blast of force indescribable. Trees took flight with the concussion that ripped them free of the ground. The very air became unbreathable, filled with debris and burning hot grit. Were it not for the hill, Ford, Surall and their Jobian charges would have already died. The impact zone had been extremely close.

A torrent of hot wind was tearing at the landscape as Surall reached the shed and tore the door open. She turned to grab at the commodore, guessing his next intent, but he’d already stopped short to help the approaching family. They crammed the seven aliens into the compact, wooden interior of the building, then pressed themselves in flush, pulling the heavy door to.

The next blast erupted just after that…




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Re: #14: Relaunch
« Reply #41 on: November 19, 2007, 10:42:38 pm »
CH. 7 [pt. 2]


“Shuttle Burton,” Commander Davenport’s voice came through the open comm channel. “Be advised that Jobian radar has detected your approach. Eight craft are on an intersect vector.”

Johnathan cursed slightly as he lowered his ship to hug the flowing terrain more closely. He was over two hundred kilometers from the town the landing party showed to be within. He could already tell from the flashes in the day sky that the town had been nuked. He glanced to his sensor panel to ensure that Ford and Surall’s transponders were still transmitting. Thus far, they showed intact.

The pilot’s mind slued back to the current problem.

“Armament and disposition of fighters?”

“They are supersonic interceptors, armed with conventional missiles and automatic cannon. Neither present a danger to your shields, but I want you to evade contact if possible.”

Bronstien glanced aside to his tactical monitor. Eight blips were approaching from his one o’clock. Evading these interceptors would be nigh impossible if he were to maintain his drive toward the commodore. He’d have to turn about completely and lose them, then return and hope no one else got wind of him. All of this would leave members of his crew exposed to radiation and further attack. They may not be alive by the time he got to them. Orders be damned, he was going to get them home.
“Understood,” He answered simply. It would be better to beg forgiveness than to beg permission. He pushed the throttle past the atmospheric limit.

The Burton was a Type I shuttle, grand for space maneuvering. He was decent in atmosphere and among the most lithe in Endeavour’s hangers. But any boxy space courier was ill made for any kind of high-speed planetary flight. The best Bronstien could hope for while in atmo would be Mach 1.2. Those approaching fighters showed to be coming in on him at well over Mach 1.3 Primitive they may have been, but the Jobians held the advantage in speed for the time being.

Could they maintain it, though? Ancient Earth fighters were rated for supersonic speeds as well, but were only capable of maintaining them for a matter of minutes till fuel exhaustion. The Burton was under no such restraint. John watched the fighters move steadily closer.

“Shuttle Burton, you are close to being sighted!” Ronald’s voice projected loudly. Bronstien grimaced despite himself.

“Understood, Endeavour. Was hoping a low profile would confuse their radar. Any other path is gonna endanger the Skipper.” He explained back, choosing his words carefully to disarm the Commander.

There was a pause from the other end. The helm officer could only imagine the hell he’d pay upon return to the ship. “Understood, Burton. Continue on course.”

Momentarily pleased that he’d allayed the ire of his XO, Bronstien looked back to the sensor screens. The alien craft were almost within view. They’d be ducking beneath the clouds any second  now…

An alarm system began to blare for attention. Two missiles shot out from beneath a cloudbank and angled in on a direct course for his vessel. The helmsman’s first instinct was to ignore them. He was already beginning a maneuver to bank clear of the primitive weapons, then he noticed their size and warhead details on his monitor. A tiny weapon with rudimentary tracking control and abysmal range capabilities. Its warhead massed only twenty pounds...

Johnathan pressed on along his course. The fighters continued in on him, following the paths of their missiles. The weapons themselves slashed in and struck almost at once on the Burton’s starboard quarter.

The shuttle bucked twice in quick succession with the impact and small detonations of the missiles. Small drain alarms sounded from the deflector control panel, followed by green indicators. No damage. Bronstien smirked and looked out ahead, paying little further attention to his pursuers.

Another volley of missiles was forthcoming as the aliens loosed nearly their entire armament upon the seemingly invulnerable machine plowing across their skies. More than ten new weapons roared straight in on the shuttle and angled in on him. John watched them with a wary eye, hands hovering over the RCS controls in case he lost helm control.

This time, the Burton was nearly knocked clean out of the sky by the detonations, one after another, of eleven striking weapons. A few of the missiles missed entirely and sped on past. The Burton bobbled and dropped low. Tree limbs cracked and scraped by against the shields. But the hearty little ship kept on flying at his full atmospheric velocity.

John angled the bow back up over the horizon and groped for altitude. The primitive fighter vessels fell into line behind the still moving, undamaged craft and began to fire short bursts of heavy caliber cannon shells into his after shields. The shielding flared and contorted under the concussive hits, but still showed no strain. The fighters were staying hot on his tail. He glanced down at the topographical display near his helm control.

The Burton was less than fifty KM from the town bearing his crewmates. Those fighters would still be on him by the time he got there. He’d have to lower his shields when he reached the area, to get his passengers aboard. Those ships would be able to strafe him with impunity. The landing party would be vulnerable. In his hurry to reach them, John may well have further endangered his people…

“Endeavour, Burton! Those fighters are gonna be all over me when I make planet fall.” Perhaps, John admitted, he should have heeded Ron’s call and avoided those craft.
“It’s going to get worse, son.” Davenport returned. “More aircraft are inbound to your position. They were already heading in to intercept the bombers, so I looks like you were in for a fight any way you handled it. You need to evade those fighters and get the Skipper’s team out ASAP!”

“Copy that, Endeavour. Request weapons free.”

Bronstien didn’t believe he could outrun these ships and lead them away in time to evade another flight of interceptors. He’d have to make short work of them. This ship could do it.

“Negative on that, Burton!” Ron sounded vehement. “Weapons safe, repeat, weapons safe! Do not open fire. Those craft cannot hurt you!”

“But they can hurt our people!”

“Weapons safe, Lieutenant! Or I’ll order you back to the ship!”

Johnathan inwardly cursed. He had to bring those planes down. If he couldn’t drop them, what could he do to knock them out of the sky? He searched his frantic mind for a way. The incessant rattle of machine gun fire tattled at the aft shields. He could imagine what those guns could do to the CO and science officer if they were caught in the open.

John’s eye caught sight of a red outlined craft on his sensor board, which was suddenly beginning to lose altitude above him. One of the fighters had edged lethally close. Now it was dropping like a rock... What the hell was the pilot planning?

John realized only too late how far these men were willing to go to protect their land and peoples. The fighter crashed directly into the aft quarter of the shuttle and exploded with at least half its fuel capacity intact. Burton plunged like a stone into the forest below and tore through the boughs of thirty odd trees as Bronstien fought near-futilely against inertia and his controls to keep his ship up. A hard hit cracked the edge of his view port.

The shields were down!

“Endeavour! Endeavour! Shields down, I have damage!” Bronstien piped off like an alarm klaxon once he brought the shuttle up over the canopy of green once more. “Generator blown!”

Struggling like a heavyweight contender, John strove for every meter of altitude he could gain. His hands flew about the panels arrayed about him. He tried to restore his defenses, but only received banks of red flashers in response. More alarms began to call as cannon rounded pinged off his naked hull.

“Endeavour! I’m taking more fire!”

“Weapons free, Shuttle Burton!” Ron’s decision was like an avenging voice from heaven. “Defend yourself and retrieve the landing party!”

John banked the shuttle back the way he’d come, swinging his bow port to starboard randomly as he fought his way clear. His right hand tapped in commands, activating phasers and targeting systems. He set the phasers for pulse fire. Hopefully the aliens would recount his gunnery as tracer fire after the fact.

Johnathan killed his velocity, putting his craft into a full hover mode, and checked over his status indicators. Damage was minimal, but there would be little chance of restoring shields. The generator had blown two circuits, and even if he though he could reroute the power flow, it would take him an hour. Burton’s thrusters were undamaged. He was still in adequate fighting condition.

A roar passed close by the shuttle, and the lieutenant winced at the flash of aircraft blasting past him overhead. John watched their trajectory and refired his engines. As he bore on once more for the Jobian town, the fighter aircraft banked in two groups and turned to come back at him. He began to lock his phasers on the leader of the larger group.

The Burton surged ahead just over the tops of green oaks. The group of four planes cut their afterburners and began to spit drooping chains of machinegun fire toward Bronstien. The shots went mostly astray, their unassisted targeting poor and inefficient. John bore toward them, coming left in a nimble turn, just as the pilots might expect. Another chatter of gunfire bounded off the hull and the main viewport before the pilot. John flinched at the impact. It cracked his port, but could not penetrate.
John returned fire.

A short burst of phaser fire lashed out, spitting from one emitter, then another in intermittent pattern. Four lances of energy pierced the onrushing fighter jet and slit it in two. The pilot tumbled from the larger portion and deployed his parachute.

The remaining three ships maintained their course, still firing long bursts of cannon fire. Alarms began to cry out as the more sensitive sensor modules and RCS thruster quads took a couple of hits. Bronstien cursed and lashed out at his aggressors once again, dropping another whom fell on fire into the forest below. The Burton slashed by the remaining two fighter vehicles and kept on toward the landing party.

The smaller group of three fighters that had split off to Johnathan’s right had circled back and were even now closing on the shuttle’s aft. More gunfire rattled across the reinforced alloy flesh of the auxiliary craft. Another thruster quad showed inoperative as the charging vessels passed by and banked away. John followed the two with split away to starboard. He drew a bead on them, one after another, and put a burst of fire into each. The first cracked into small portions and spun away in different directions. John didn’t see the pilot bail out. The second craft simply burst into flame and began to roll over and over. The pilot tried to make egress, but could only get his canopy open and fail ineffectually before his ship hit the dirt.

Bronstien rightened his bearing back for his destination. The fighters were keeping further behind now. There were only three left, two pacing him from a kilometer aft, and a single other who was still heading away. John increased speed to the highest velocity his maneuvering jets could maintain. With three quads now inoperative, his maximum safe speed was halved. He could solve this by engaging the impulse drive, but even the least power from the main engines this low in an atmosphere would likely send him plummeting to the deck. There were reasons one didn’t fly a craft with an irregular hull that fast while planetside.

John began to pass over the rural surroundings of the small town. Great, blossoming mushroom clouds grew skyward and a corona of expanding energy still flowed over the landscape, knocking down buildings. The Burton crashed through the pressure wave, bucking hard as he hit. The closing fightercraft turned away from the detonation. They’d done all they could and were unwilling to endure hard rads from ground zero.

John slowed to a crawl, trying not to look over the carnage spreading about his craft. He had a signal on the transponder frequency he was scanning. Tracking it amid the rads and the heavy EM interference however, would take him some time.





Chevis Ford tried to clamp his hands over his ears against the clamor of screaming within the small space he and the other survivors were crammed into. The electromagnetic surge from the two bursts had all but fried his personal equipment, including the UT circuit of his communicator. The babble of the Jobian family was as unintelligible as it was excruciating. Surall herself had closed her eyes and was tuning the world out.

The blasts had not injured the survivors huddled into the hillside shed. But the increasing radiation and heat were already taking their toll. The babble of the natives was quickly turning into fright fueled screams of pain. Ford’s flesh was crawling, burning and itching with the rads he’d already sustained. There was little light in the shed. He could not see much of the visible effects of their increasing injuries. He didn’t want to. Both he and Surall would need serious radiation treatment upon returning to the ship.

Another roar overtook the cringing survivors. Ford wondered in growing panic if yet another bomber had come for them. Were more bombs about to fall on them? He could still hear the blast of winds from the first two.

“Commodore Ford!” Came a thunderous voice from beyond the heavy wooden door. It was Bronstien! “I’m here to evacuate you! The Burton is landed just outside your cover. Six meters! I’ll open the hatch when I see you!”

Ford turned amid the pressing mass of bodies and looked to his science officer. She looked back at him, concern for their charges obvious on her normally impassive face. Her dark eyes looked back at him, wide but steady. She knew what he was asking her. And she did not argue with him over the point. The family had fallen silent at the sound of the booming, alien voice and unfamiliar language from outside.

“Let’s get ‘em on board, Lieutenant!”

Surall fought her way to the back of the family and spread her arms wide to compel them forward. Ford threw open the heavy door, showing the natives the spectacle of the destroyed visage of their homes and the large alien vessel sitting in the middle of it all. Ford grabbed the smallest of the walking children and charged out into the open, sure that the mother would follow the evil man bearing away with her child. She did. The rest bustled along, shoved unceremoniously out into the hellish scene and toward the shuttle. Even in his hurry, Ford could make out all the damage and scratches in the hull. The Burton had had to fight his way down here.

The main, aft hatch reeled down to the ground long enough for the two officers to pack the family of Jobians into the ship. Surprisingly, the elders were so amazed and dumbstruck they offered little more than confused resistance. Soon, the door was pulling back up into its mount. Johnathan, his human face making the natives shrink away, looked back from the cockpit section.

“Everyone okay?”

Surall looked the natives over and glanced back from her stooping position aft. “Radiation burns and severe absorption. The after effects will be showing soon.”

John turned back to his controls as he began to lift them away from the surface. “I’ll put sickbay on the alert.”

Ford, bleary eyed and now feeling sick to his stomach, struggled forward and bent beneath the low bulkhead separating the aft compartment from the fore section. His instinct told him to take the ops position at the pilot’s side. But practicality and common sense overrode this impression. He was soaked with hard radiation. He’d affect Bronstien, possibly causing injury. The amputee had been through enough in the last few months. He remained aft during the trip back to Endeavour.
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Re: #14: Relaunch
« Reply #42 on: November 21, 2007, 11:01:16 pm »


Ford is officially on Top Ten Coolest CO's Ever status. Way to take the PD, wrap it up nicely and flip it ye olde Double Duece. Just freaking awesome.

I do hope that in one of the next issues of this story there is some explination as to why the shiny red button was pushed. It seems to me like a "what if" scenario in which USSR decided to nuke USA just before the first moon shot, possibly to keep USA from being able to take all the glory.

I read this and I think back to one of my favorite scenes in Atomic Cafe; the scenario is that USSR invaded southern California and the US Army decided that the only way to get rid of the Communists is to detonate an A-bomb. Since this is a simulation, the test is in the desert and not the pleasant township of L.A. Bomb is supposed to go off and army troops (all grunts!) are supposed to go in and clear the area. Ye Olde A-Bomb goes off, and cut to cut scene 1, instructor describes the types of radiation to the soon to be almost nuked troops, Alpha, Beta, Gamma and Neutron. Next comes cut scene 2, a cutesy animation describing how Alpha radiation interacts with the human body that obviously is unavailable to our kinda doomed troops. Basically it says that Alpha particles are most harmful when inhaled or ingested, since they can be blocked by normal, every day skin. Cut back to the bomb and the shockwave, and each troop shown in this part (yeah, you guessed it) is staring at the blast, mouth wide open. Somewhere in this they show a reporter asking the troops if they kept their mouth shut or not, each answered that they got a mouthful of dirt. Now, after all that explaining, I have to ask, did our heros have their mouths shut?

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P.S. Find a copy of Atomic Cafe and watch it. Brings new meaning to microwaved bacon in one scene. Even has the "duck *SWOOSH* and cover" song...

And I'll leave you with these quotes from the film, found on imdb:

Army information film: When not close enough to be killed, the atomic bomb is one of the most beautiful sights in the world.

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Civil defense film: Be sure to include tranquilizers to ease the strain and monotony of life in a fallout shelter. A bottle of 100 should be sufficient for a family of four. Tranquilizers are not a narcotic, and are not habit-forming.


P.P.S. did I mention I love this stuff?
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Re: #14: Relaunch
« Reply #43 on: November 22, 2007, 08:27:03 pm »
Reason for the war was pretty simple so far as it goes, and all the clues are there. The southern nation decided to put a nuclear armed missile platform in space during their little 'test launch'. The northern nation found out and, being beyong Earth-nation-paranoid, they started their nuclear war. No the whole scenario isn't perfect and it likely wouldn't really happen this way...but then, I was aiming to mimic 50's and 60's WWIII stuff, so I intentionally didn't over-think it.

Glad you like Ford's way of command. He understands the necessity for the PD as much as the best commanders. He just isn't going to lose his people over it. Nor is he going to let folk die when he can stop it. I had another way for the shuttle scene to go, but it wasn't quite 'Ford'.

Original Scene: Bronstien lands the shuttle outside the hill and Ford opens the door, giving the scared natives a real good view of the craft as its rear hatch eases down. Surall wastes no time entering the ship, but Ford hesitates. He climbs onto the ramp and halts, looking back to the open shed and the aliens within. They stare back. The mother almost takes a step toward the ship, showing that she knows it to be salvation for her and her family. Ford pauses, looks back into the shuttle to Bronstien, who waves him in. Ford looks back, almost deciding to close the hatch. But then he waves the family on board.

I thought that the scene would be rather heart-grabbing, but in the end...I decided that Ford, knowing he could EASILY save some lives, wouldn't even think about it. He'd just do it. Period. So the scene wound up as shorter [which my aching fingers thanked me for...].

More thoughts before I wrap this one up?

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Re: #14: Relaunch
« Reply #44 on: November 23, 2007, 07:22:54 pm »
Guess I'll finish this'n off.

I hope it has been thoroughly enjoyed by all!




Epilogue





Shuttle Burton settled on the foredeck of the hanger bay and began to power down. A large crew of men and women were waiting with medical equipment and hover gurneys for the injured people within the ship. The door slowly descended to the deck with a thud. Confused, wide-eyed Jobians were the first to shuffle down to the outside, looking to and from with amazed fear.

Doctor Andrea Keller moved forward, waving her nurses and techs to the waiting patients. “Begin inoculation against gamma rays. Get Bronstien too. Let’s get the crew and passengers covered by the radiation field and move them to decon.”

Her people knew their jobs. They paid no attention to the fearful stares of the aliens who weren’t supposed to be here. They weren’t concerned for the Prime Directive, which told them not to interfere with primitive societies. They only cared for saving lives and caring for the injured. They began to inject inoculations into the visitors’ veins and ushered them inside the waiting containment field about the hovering gurneys. The aliens chattered amid themselves. Some pushed away from their benefactors, but were convinced to cooperate.

Keller saw that they were being handled effectively, then turned her attention back to the shuttle standing before her. Her own fear compelled her closer. She mounted the lowered ramp tentatively, peering in. Bronstien was coming her way, flanked by the science officer. They both paused a second before her. Surall was impassive, though she seemed uncomfortable. She was probably feeling sick from the rad poisoning. Both stepped past her, Bronstien doing so with a hard stare.

Ford was getting up from the bench lining the port bulkhead. His eyes were downcast as she approached. He didn’t notice her till he was standing fully and looking down at her. The doctor’s mouth dropped open…quivered. Feelings welled up within her, unwanted and unwelcome.

She hadn’t realized the level of her worry till she’d laid eyes on him. She’d feared for Ford’s life from the moment she’d heard about the nuclear strikes below. He’d come close to dying again.

“Chevy…”

“Chevy?” He repeated. He stared at her. Bronstien and Surall spared a look back their way, then discretely stepped out of sight. Andrea stepped in closer to the commodore on impulse, almost against her own will.

“I…”

“Worried about me?” He asked with a soft smile. His entire face morphed around his wide grins.

“Yes!”

“Me too.” His smile faded as uncertainty tainted his eyes. “I’m fine.”

Andrea rushed the final step into his arms and grabbed hold fiercely. Regardless of the rads she was absorbing, she clung to him, hugging him tightly as tears slid down her cheeks. Had she really believed he was in that much danger? She didn’t know. This eruption of emotion had blindsided her. She felt like letting go and crying aloud. Her hands grabbed at the flesh of his back. His own hands folded around the contours of her back as his breathing subsided and mellowed. They stood in tight embrace for some time.

Ford’s hand found hers, pulled the hypo free of her grip. He pressed the spray to his neck to inoculate himself. Then he pressed it to Keller’s arm as she looked back up at him with a giggle. Chevis smiled on, warm and happy. “To keep us from dropping dead.” He explained.

Andrea laughed a bit, and pressed close into him again. She didn’t know what their future would bring them, or whether this was a good idea at all…but she knew she was happy right there, in Ford’s arms. They remained for a time before heading for Sickbay.
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The commodore sat at his desk within the much safer confines of his ready room. The surgical alterations that had allowed him to move freely among the aliens below was long gone. Their Jobian guests had been sedated and beamed down into a small hamlet far south of the warzone still raging on their world.

Endeavour remained in orbit, studying what might be the death of two separate nations. These people were exploring the road Earth had long since turned away from. Some civic and xenohistorical intel could be gleaned from the happenings below. Ford was no longer interested.

The flag officer reflected on the mission to the Jobian world. He had tried to relieve the crew with a non-combat mission of exploration and study. It had almost cost him and Surall their lives. Surall, after treatment for radiation sickness and burns, had returned to duty and silently began cataloguing the goings-on of the peoples below. Even now, her eyes were glued to her sensors on the bridge.

Ford shook his head as he mulled over everything that had happened. He had often wondered if he bore a curse. Days like this pressed home the theory. However, Keller’s actions upon his return home had given him doubt about the curse.

He didn’t know if their relationship was back on the road, or if this was simply an example of feminine confusion under stress and worry. Either way, it showed her feelings for him. There was still hope. Ford looked away from the sweating glass of tea that sat on his black desk. He toyed with the thought of making his log entry. What words would put this day into context? Telling the fleet what had happened would be the easy part. The rest… That would bear more thought.

The hatch opened from the security foyer aft of the bridge. Lieutenant Bronstien stepped in and stood at attention while the door slid sh